Plz grade my essay...seriously freaking out now

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<p>I would sincerely appreciate it if anyone could grade my essay (out of 12). I am seriously freaking out right now ; this is my first essay and I have the SAT in a few days. Any advice would be greatly appreciated.</p>

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<p>The Prompt : It is better to be underrated by people than to be overrated by them.</p>

<p>People, in general, crave attention and praise ; they love to be the centre of attention, and are conscious of what others think about them. Despite these inherent qualities, it is actually better, at times, if people thought less of you and did not regard you so highly ; a fact that is buttressed by many examples in literature and my own personal experiences.</p>

<p>In J.K Rowling’s series of ‘ Harry potter ‘ books, the stories’ protagonist, a teenager by the name of Harry Potter, is constantly fighting for his life against the stories’ antagonist Voldemort and his minions. They always underestimate Harry and attribute his success in escaping from their clutch to dumb luck. However, it was this miscalculation of Harry’s real talent that led to Voldemort’s eventual downfall. Had Voldemort considered Harry to be an equal and formidable opponent, then Voldemort would have had a much greater chance at defeating Harry Potter.</p>

<p>My own personal experiences have taught me that being overrated is not all that it seems. During my years at high school, I tried out for the basketball team. Every shot I took during the tryouts went straight in the basket. Suffice to say, the coach was elated and I was immediately inducted into the team. He thought I was a natural, and that I was going to be a great asset to the team. However, deep down, I knew that I was a mediocre player, and that most of the shots I made were flukes. The day of the first match came, and I was selected as the key offensive player by the coach, who thought he had a sure path to victory. His thoughts of victory were shattered when, at the end of the match, I had only managed to get a score of 2. If only the coach hadn’t thought I was such a talented player, then we wouldn’t have lost so badly.</p>

<p>Contrary to what many people believe, being underrated has its benefits. People will not expect too much from, and you also have the edge over others ; they may think that you are ordinary, but then when you actually do something extraordinary, you will really stand out.</p>

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<p>Pls leave feedback!!!</p>

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<p>a 5 or a 6 definitely- but did you really write this essay in 25 minutes?</p>

<p>and yes do try to put in a 3rd example.</p>

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<p>leave personal example out if possible, and relate your example paragraphs to your thesis.</p>

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<p>^really?</p>

<p>I thought his harry potter example was significantly poorer than his personal experience. The basketball example was good with specific examples but the HP one lacked a specific example. </p>

<p>Not bad. I would give it a 9 or 10</p>

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<p>I would give it a 5. Remember that a 6 means clear and consistent mastery. I'd think you can give much better examples than what you gave. Harry Potter should have been elaborated more upon. Your basketball story is a good example.</p>