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<p>Most people think that contentment—being happy with the way things are—is the perfect state of affairs. After all, what could be better than being so satisfied with how things are that you don't want anything else? But contentment has disadvantages: if we are content with the way things are, we are not motivated to change things, to improve ourselves, or to do better. We must therefore always choose between being content and pushing ourselves to do better.</p>

<p>Assignment: Does being content with the way things are prevent people from improving themselves and doing better? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>My essay:
Contentment is the state of being satisfied with what one has acquired. Fulfillment does prevent people from attempting to improve themselves because they will have no motivation.
From personal experience, I realize that if I have accomplished a goal, like finishing a project, I won't strive for more. When I'm discontent, I will most likely have a desire to do better. The same goes for technology. For instance, if people were 100% pleased with the technology we have today, no one would make an effort to invent and develop new computers, phones, etc.
Individuals endeavor for contentment because being able to say "I'm happy" feels great. When they have reached a state of satisfaction, they will hold themselves back from trying to change things because that requires the effort and motivation they don't have.</p>

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<p>SAT Essay prompt?</p>

<p>And uhh is that it?</p>

<p>If that’s it…then a 4/12</p>

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<p>Quick Advice:</p>

<p>You should always have atleast 2 SPECIFIC Examples.</p>

<p>Then expand on both examples clearly and effectively.</p>

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<p>This was the prompt for the October SATs this year. </p>

<p>In terms of your essay, it’s way too short to get a high mark. There is almost no development of the argument and your examples are quite weak. </p>

<p>“Individuals endeavor for contentment because being able to say “I’m happy” feels great.”
This sentence confused me. I’m not sure why you said this because it is quite redundant/extremely obvious. </p>

<p>I don’t want to sound too harsh, but I would rate it 2/6. Some good things about your essay was that you used proper grammar and your diction was varied. You obviously have a lot of potential so try to use those 25 minutes to get your ideas on paper. There is also a strong correlation between length of essay and essay scores so try to fill those two pages that are given to you.</p>