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<p>Hi. I will be appearing for the SAT in January and would like you guys to rate my essay. Please do mention if the rate is on 1-6 scale or a 1-12 scale.</p>

<p>Do we need other people in order to understand ourselves?</p>

<p>Do we need other people in order to understand ourselves? I think most people would agree with me when I say that yes, we really do need other people. The importance of our friends and family in helping us understand ourselves is exemplified in literature, history and my own personal experience.</p>

<p>The Lord of the Rings, a fantasy novel written by J.R.R. Tolkien really goes a step ahead in highlighting how friends help us in understanding ourselves. Two meek hobbits, Frodo and Sam, from the town of Shire set out on a journey to Mount Doom to destroy the one Rhine and the Dark Lord Sauron. During their journey, Frodo is very reluctant to proceed ahead and feels that he is not up to the task but his trusted companion Sam who is tenacious and steadfast from the beginning, encourages him from time to time and reinforces his audacity. This support leads Frodo to become aware of the fact that he can really accomplish this task and then does so. If Sam had not been present to bolster Frodo’s courage, Frodo would never have been able to complete the journey, thus proving that support of others is really essential.</p>

<p>History also serves to emphasize the place of other people in our lives. Fatima Jinnah was the sister of Muhammad Ali Jinnah, the founder of Pakistan. Before independence, Muhammad Ali Jinnah worked tirelessly for Muslim rights in the subcontinent aswell for an autonomous country where Muslims would be able to practice their religion freely. At one point, Ali almost gave up but his sister, Fatima, never up his side and kept supporting him through all his ordeals. It was her support that again ignited the drive in Jinnah and he went on to liberate Pakistan from the subcontinent.</p>

<p>My own reform in life also goes on to demonstrate the need of family in one’s life. In my early childhood, I constantly flunked classes and was dejected by everyone but my ingenious brother, Zack who stood resolute in his belief that I could improve. His trust served as a source of motivation for and me and I was finally able to look in myself and understand my weaknesses.</p>

<p>Thus it is evident that we really do need other people in our life to understand ourselves as they support us, never let us falter and help us in every way possible.</p>

<p>390~ words</p>

I’d say 10 or 11 out of 12. It’s structured well and has a literary and historical example, but I’ve heard from many prep centers that personal examples are weaker than historical or literary examples.
I like that you were to the point though, and all your examples prove your thesis. If I was a grader, I would’ve given it a 5/6

Notice that your first two examples show how we need others to SUPPORT us, but show nothing abut UNDERSTANDING ourselves.

I would give this a 5 out of 6 because I think that your structure and examples are all great, but I do agree with @WasatchWriter‌ 's point that although you do answer the needing other people part, you don’t quite answer the “understanding ourselves” part (like just a tiny bit in the third paragraph but that’s it). So next time, make sure that you respond to every part of the prompt and you’ll do great!

Rate mine please in exchange? http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/sat-preparation/1725754-grade-comment-on-my-practice-sat-essay-please.html
I’m taking it in January too! Good luck to you!

Thanks people! Appreciated.
I also had this doubt in my mind that my examples weren’t that great but I couldn’t come up with anymore so I just went ahead.
I’ll keep that in mind next time.
Any tips on how to formulate examples so they suit your topic better?