<p>It's my 3rd revision and it's getting there, I'd just like some cleaning up and feedback. PM for it. Thanks :D</p>
<p>Prompt:
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or
experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>
<p>You can pm me your essay if I could pm mine to you. Mine is the first prompt, and I was wondering if it actually answered the question. Is that alright?</p>
<p>Sure! I’d love to give feedback ;D Would emailing or something work since I need 15 posts?</p>
<p>Yeah sure, I can do that</p>
<p>Could I have your email address? I’m not really sure how to send it to you without pm</p>
<p>I’ll just reply here since I can’t yet PM:</p>
<p>I think it does fit the UC prompt quite well, as the definition of “world” is very broad- it can by physical, physiological, big or small (for my answer to the prompt, I talked about an online community haha). If anything you can probably tone down some of the description in the first part to talk about more insight on why you were scared. But I think it’s good to go as it is 
Now to figure out how to get my essay to you… PM me your email?</p>
<p>Edited to remove infornation</p>