Roommate Essay

<p>This is my first real attempt at the Stanford roommate essay. is it too strange and weird? Do you like my approach? does it make you hate me, or want to get to know me? Thank you so so much in advance for reading it and giving feedback, if you do :) </p>

<p>Dear future roommate,
Sometimes it seems as if I can get to know someone better from a list of random quirks and curiosities than from an hour-long conversation about school, family, and other dull stats. I’ll tell you that I’m a girl, blonde, blue-eyed, and generally happy. I’ll tell you that I love school and learning, have taken Irish dance classes for six years, play the piano and flute, and like to read and write. I’ll tell you that I’m an Engineering major. But do you really learn a lot from that? Does that tell you who I am and what distinguishes me from the crowd? Maybe it does, if you’re a psychology major and can pick my words apart and deduce more meaning from them. I supposed anything’s possible.
I think you will learn more about who I am from the rest of my letter. I have compiled a list of some things I think are unusual or amusing about myself. Hopefully it will help you get to know me, and entertain you at the same time!
My friends and I invented a complete alphabet in eighth grade, and I still remember and use it. One of my biggest pet peeves is when someone doesn’t put the parking brake on before getting out of the car, even though I know it isn’t always necessary. I tend to talk a bit loudly, especially when I am excited, and my dad has to remind me to talk softly sometimes, like I’m in Kindergarten and have to use my “inside voice.” I love to reread my favorite books over and over and over, and I saw the Harry Potter and the Half-Blood Prince five times in the theater with different people each time. I like to have my bed made very neatly, and I can’t stand having blankets and sheets wrinkled around my feet. In any case, I almost always fall asleep on top of the blankets and wake up under them, whether they’re wrinkled or not. I used to get teased for wearing bobby socks and not using cosmetics. I now prefer ankle socks, but I still don’t wear makeup. I love bright colors, and usually wear black converse embellished with flamboyant shoelaces with rainbow stars. I tend to be very energetic, a quality that is only amplified by sugar or caffeine.
I hope this letter has given you some idea of who I am, and I certainly hope it hasn’t made you hate me before you have even met me in person. That’s not my intention, but I guess if you are a fashion connoisseur without a nerdy bone in your body or are easily annoyed by hyper people, it’s a possibility. In any case, I look forward to meeting you!
Sincerely,
[my name]</p>

<p>It's also about 500 characters over the limit.... so if you have suggestions on specific things to cut/shorten, let me know!! thank you!</p>

<p>I think you will learn more about who I am from the rest of my letter. I have compiled a list of some things I think are unusual or amusing about myself. Hopefully it will help you get to know me, and entertain you at the same time!</p>

<p>I’ve compiled a list of unusual but amusing traits that’ll help you get to know (and maybe laugh at) me.</p>

<p>^^ went from 48 words to 20 words.</p>

<p>My friends and I invented a complete alphabet in eighth grade, and I still remember and use it.</p>

<p>My friends and I invented a complete alphabet in eighth grade that I still use. -3 words</p>

<p>Good essay though!</p>

<p>thank you!</p>

<p>I reread the first sentence like 3 times. It’s just so run on and not very interesting.
I actually like the "I have compiled a list of some things I think are unusual or amusing about myself. Hopefully it will help you get to know me, and entertain you at the same time! " as the first sentence. </p>

<p>“My friends and I invented a complete alphabet in eighth grade, and I still remember and use it.”
This is interesting but I want more. Explain it a bit. </p>

<p>“I certainly hope it hasn’t made you hate me before you have even met me in person. That’s not my intention, but I guess if you are a fashion connoisseur without a nerdy bone in your body or are easily annoyed by hyper people, it’s a possibility.”
I would just take this out. Seems a bit rude. And doesn’t add much. Work on the conclusion a bit. </p>

<p>“I love to reread my favorite books over and over and over, and I saw the Harry Potter and the Half-Blood Prince five times in the theater with different people each time.”
You talk about reading…then you switch to watching a movie. Also Harry Potter is like the obvious go-to movie. Maybe choose an actual book you always reread? You can take out one of the “and over” to cut out some characters. </p>

<p>good luck!</p>