Hi,
It would be great if you can grade and critique the following essay. The topic is “Should people take more responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities or the nation in general?”
ESSAY:
Social psychologist Yildiz suggested that humans desire to improve their living conditions but often depend excessively on external factors such as the government to achieve this goal. It is critical that we understand not only that we possess a huge power, but also that we should strive to take more responsibility for solving problems that affect us. Examples in literature and history are very pervasive.
Brutus in William Shakespeare’s Julius Caesar is an ideal example of a person who takes immense responsibility to solve a problem that his country, Italy, was facing. Though a loving ally of Caesar, Brutus joins a conspiracy to assassinate him, as he feared that Caesar was ascending the ladder to tyranny. The ascension of a single man to absolute power was bound to ensnare the country into monarchism, something unacceptable to Brutus. Brutus takes the responsibility for preserving the republican status of Rome into his own hands. He reminds us that we must strive to solve problems that affect us.
Rotana Tarabzouni is another classic example of a person who has stood up for her community. She grew up in Saudi Arabia, in an environment that restricted her freedom in every possible way, from apparel to expression. She wanted to become a singer, but her culture forbade that; hence, she moved to the US where she learnt how to sing. She sang songs encouraging the liberation of Saudi women. She has inspired several women to stand for their rights. In a very apt manner, she strived to solve a pervasive social issue.
As evident from the above examples, taking responsibilities extremely important and can help resolve pertinent issues. Thus, we must be mindful of our potency and take initiative.
