SAT Essay, plz gimme some comments

<p>The Prompt is the 8th assignment in the ColBoar prep book about heroes.
Here it goes:</p>

<p>"Mom, I want to be Superman, I want the S on my chest, I want to cloak on my back, I want to be the man of steel, a hero". We often hear the frivolous voice of a kid crying out to his mom in front of the Ball Costume Shop. Nonetheless, when this kid grows older and learns more about this unkind life, the above misconception is most likely to be repelled away. A real hero is not necessarily a robust machine, 6 feet 9 and flying around. It is the type of man that had the perseverance and courage to prevail over intimidating obstacles to say or to do what others can not or dares not to do.</p>

<p>Would a small, less-than-middle-class black girl be able to go to prestigious colleges or to work in fancy corporations without Martin Luther King Jr.? We are not sure about that. MLK Jr., the pride of African-American, the peace and equality-seeker, the symbol of a tireless fighter is surely considered a hero. Is he big and muscular like Shaquille O’Neal? No he isn’t. But he stood up, against all odds, as a fearless leader to deliver the unprecedented “I have a Dream” speech that set free many African-American souls. The murderer, James Earl Ray, certainly could take away his blood, but how can he cold the fire of spirit, of fairness in the hero’s soul that would be forever applauded by mankind.</p>

<p>My friend is a small boy, he cannot shoot the three ball to beat that buzzer in tough basketball game, neither can he mention clearly to a girl that he liked her vintage hairstyle; however, to all of us, he is always a hero who dared to face the truth. Two months ago, the joyful and lively sound from “Voice of Ams” high school radio show was rudely reinstated by the mournful silences every break. The principal said the replacement was due to the “extravagance cost” of the show. Two months of quiescent passed by and no one had the courage to go to talk to the severe principal. But him. The innate debater in my small pal stood up for a moment and with the rhetorical expressions and persuasive ideas, he convinced the principal’s shallow mind to bring back the show. His outlandish attainment made him a true hero in my class since then.</p>

<p>I always admire Billy Gilman’s angel voice when it sounded: “There’s a hero in everybody’s heart.” Yes, a hero is a man who can surmount the fear of rejection, to do selfless things in order to bring happiness to people around him. So watch out for the small man standing next to you in the metro. He might be a hero you’d got to sing his praise one day.</p>

<p>I'm an international student and I know some of the ideas may be awkward to you guys, but I really appreciate your comments.</p>