Sat Essay

College Essays
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<p>Sorry if this should be in the SAT prep section.</p>

<p>"No one is contented in this wold, I believe. There is always something left to desire, and the last thing longer for always seems the most necessary to happiness." - Marie Corelli, A Romance of Two Worlds</p>

<p>Do you think that people are capable of finding happiness or are they always searching for something beyond what they have?</p>

<pre><code>The old adage “the grass is always greener on the other side comes to mind when one is seeking happiness in life. It is human nature to never be content with one’s current lifestyle, thus forcing one to improve one’s standard of living.
An example of this behavoir(sp error) is in Voltaire’s novelette, Candide. Protagonist Candide finds himself in a utopia where streets are paved with gold and there is no crime. However, when faced with the decision to stay or leave, Candide decides he can not be happy without his love and leaves. Voltaire illustrates that even in a perfect world, it is human nature to search for better.
Although this nearly obsessive search for improvement borderlines greed, it is certainly for the best. Without it, how else can one better himself? Only through perseverance, trial, and perhaps luck, can a life be improved.
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<p>Eh, its really short, but I did use almost all of the 25 minutes. Feel free to be brutal, just constructive.</p>

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<p>You have no closing quotes after "side."</p>

<p>It's spelled "behavior."</p>

<p>"There is no crime" is passive.</p>

<p>"Cannot" is one word unless you want to stress "not."</p>

<p>For some reason, "... without his love and leaves" makes me think that he requires leaves from a plant.</p>

<p>"To search for better" is a bit vague.</p>

<p>"For the best" could be more specific.</p>

<p>You can't mix impersonal pronouns with personal ones; so it'd be, "how else can one better oneself?"</p>

<p>I wouldn't put a comma after "luck."</p>

<p>Overall, well-structured, but remember, style (as well as content) is important in the SAT essay.</p>

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<p>hm...you want my honest opinion? SAT essay...can easily be done using a given formula. Sure, its the retarded way out, but i got a 12 both times i used it. Testmasters in houston offers it, so im not going to post it online. but...</p>