SAT essay.

<p>Ony Louis March, 28, 2009
SAT essay
The love for money as well as power and fame are all things that are powerful catalysts that drive people from every corner of our civilization to make decisions whether there are right or wrong. I believe that the want for money, power, and fame are all more powerful motivators than ones own conscience, these motives which seem to lack any depth in personality are often repeated in our literature and history.</p>

<p>Examples of the struggle for power in our literature lie in the epic poem “The Iliad” by Bard Homer, the poem is about the Trojan War with the Achaeans who fight to retrieve the wife of Menelaus Helen. Both sides change their motives from Helen to prove it’s superiority over on another, in the end of the story the Achaeans infiltrate the Trojan walls by disguising themselves in a wooden horse and later pillage the Trojan stronghold and burn down the city.</p>

<p>The idea that money is a more powerful motivator than conscience can be seen in our society today, an example of this lies in our world of sports where the thought of making millions seduces the minds of young athletes. This can be seen in the world of college basketball, this is known as the one and done rule when athletes are allowed to spend one year in college and may later take part in the NBA draft. Previously, the NBA allowed players to be drafted directly from high school, since 2006 draftees must be at least 19 years old and one year out of high school.</p>

<p>To further show that money, power and fame prove to be more powerful motives can be seen in the stock market crash in 1929 and the great depression. These events were caused by the roaring twenties where consumerism sky rocketed, as the economy grew consequently debt grew also this was caused by Americans spending more than they can afford and wealth shrunk down into a concentrated group. Also big businesses became greedy which also led to the downward spiral of the American economy.</p>

<p>As you can see in the examples of history and literature money, power, and fame are more influential motives than that of our own conscience, the want for more often clouds our better judgment making us pursue them even more whether it will worsen our situation or better it people often focus their thoughts on money, power, and fame for the desire self benefit and being immortalized in history.</p>

<p>after reading this i would like it someone would post a response to this</p>

<p>I’m not sure what you mean by respond? I think I agree with what the essay says. If you’re asking for a sort of grade for it? I would give it 7-8. It may just be how I was taught, but when see the words I or you in a formal essay, it really bothers me. Also, the examples seem somewhat forced and are not clearly connected to the point of the essay. It is generally well written, though there are some technical errors, and a good handful of awkward sentences.</p>