<p>Topic: Should people be more willing to excuse the errors and shortcomings of others? </p>
<p>Essay:</p>
<p>"Revenge is sweet but forgiveness is sweeter", my values II teacher once said. We, as humans, commonly make mistakes. The same applies to others. All humans make mistakes and so we should be more willing to excuse others as we do for ourselves. </p>
<p>If you define perfect as being most favorable in every quality, then nobody is perfect. Everybody has flaws, which can be negligible or significant. But to say anyone has no absolute flaw is a fallacy. Consider honesty, it cannot be said that no one ever tells a lie. We all tell lies at situations, no matter how they affect others. Even the most lovely friend that I meet does lie, though for the sake of others. To perceive that nobody is perfect will compel us to be more grateful to to others.</p>
<p>Forgiveness brings unity. If everyone points and disgusts at one another's mistake, there will be no peace but chaos. Thailand is in jeopardy right now because of unforgiveness to one another. The Yellows does not forgive the Reds and the Reds does not forgive the Yellows. As a result, hostility takes place over the country, injuring the country's economy and Thai population. There must be forgiveness and camaraderie will there be peace and unity.</p>
<p>Even so, we should not always forgive others for the same mistake. We must be determined in righteousness and the same mistakes others make tends to mean an evilness absorbed in their vein. To forgive again encourages the to make mistakes again. My friend who likes having fights, if not punishment, will commit to fight again.Punishment is not a malignance for him but merely a reminder so that he could change for good.</p>
<p>In conclusion, forgiveness is crucial but forgiveness for the same mistake will not do. While Jesus's teaching about "love and forgiveness" seems the most important, Pao Bun Jin's attitude of "justice and determination" can be more crucial at certain times.</p>
<p>I’ll give you a 3…couple of gramatical errors</p>
<p>I’d give it a 4.</p>
<p>I think you are making real progress here in this latest essay thanakorns, but you really have to watch the logic in your response to the prompt. </p>
<p>You are arguing in favor of the prompt- ie there are reasons <em>why</em> people should more forgiving of others shortcomings.
-para #1: nobody is perfect. Ok but not really responsive to the prompt. Maybe if you then said we might be banking forgiveness for our own shortcomings you would have had a <em>why</em>.<br>
-para #2: Better, although I would have liked it if you explained that Red and Yellows are some sort of gangs. Now you have a Why: lack of forgiveness of between the groups is injuring the economy and the general population. This paragraph would been better with more specific- what is there between these groups to forgive? Are there specifics about economic damage? maybe cancelled events?
-para 3: You are kind of taking the other side of the argument. If your other examples were stronger you might get away with this as a refinement of your thesis, but as things stand you just weaken your premise. </p>
<p>Conclusion: The purpose of the conclusion is to say “yeah I just totally proved by thesis through my examples”. Instead you are introducing new information- ie Jesus and Pao Bun Jin. And it appears that you have refined your thesis to practically take the other side of the argument. I dont think your observation here is bad, but it is a dangerous thing to do on the SAT essay. You are supposed to take a clear position and then assemble examples that progress your reasoning in support your your thesis. Examining both sides is a problem. </p>
<p>Small issues: a course title is capitalized “Values II”.
- “if not punishment” either punished or given punishment
- “Punishment is not a malignance”. ‘Malignance’ is wrong- ‘hardship’ would be more apt. </p>
<p>I like your transition “Even so”. And I also like your quote ““Revenge is sweet but forgiveness is sweeter””. If you are going to open with a quote you could take advantage and build on it more. For instance a call back in the conclusion.</p>