Share your 11/12 essays

<p>I took the SAT reasoning test in October and got a 10 on the essay using a very general format. Introduction, example 1 with analysis, example 2 with analysis, supporting point, conclusion (not very strong). I sprinkled the essay with medium level vocabulary but had a good overall point to get across.</p>

<p>My only practice before this was one essay I wrote a day before the SAT and read a few guides around CC. My examples weren't literary/historical. I used real life (lame) examples, but analyzed them well. Anyways, I'm retaking the test again in December and would like to go for a 11 or 12 on the essay this time.</p>

<p>I did not find the example 'score 6' essays in the blue book to be following a strict format and most had just one example (even personal ones), so I wanted to check out what worked for other test takers. Screenshots of your essay will be awesome if you would want to share, especially the October test takers. The detailed score report will also be out for the November test takers with their essays, in a few days. Thanks in advance.</p>

<p>I would be interested in this as well. Its hard to guarantee a 12, or even an 11.</p>

<p>Anyone? :O</p>

<p>I have one. I am well-known for my completely bull s h i t essays (among my other SAT-prepping classmates) that are vacuous and sometimes repetitive and I cannot believe that I scored an 11. By the way this essay was from 10 months back.</p>

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<p>This is from October 2010 – [Free</a> File Hosting Made Simple - MediaFire](<a href=“File sharing and storage made simple”>My Files)</p>

<p>By the way the prompts for the respective tests were:</p>

<p>Do people make the greatest discoveries by exploring what is unfamiliar to them or by paying close attention to what seems familiar</p>

<p>And</p>

<p>Are people influenced by external environment… or sth I do not know the exact wording</p>

<p>I got a 12 Essay on the November 2010. I thought it’d get an 11 or 10 but I can share it with you when it comes out in a week or so.</p>

<p>Yes I got a 12 too on that November essay. Will post it as soon as the images arrive from the College Board.</p>

<p>@SakataGintoki
Thanks a lot for the share, did you get 11 on both of them?</p>

<p>The additional score report comes out on the 30th, so I hope we’ll be able to see some more 11/12 essays by then.</p>

<p>I got an 11 on my January SAT but the hand writing is so awful that I can’t even type it up.</p>

<p>I got 11s on both my October and November essays. Here are the links to my october essay.</p>

<p>Prompt. Is it absolutely necessary for people to study the creative arts?</p>

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<p>I’m sure there are many other people who’ve scored an 11/12. The score reports for November are due today, and I’m sure many of you would’ve scored a 12. :P</p>

<p>Please share, I have to write that 12 points essay on Saturday and I definitely need to get as much of an idea as I can from other people like me. :)</p>

<p>All typos are intentional. I got an 11 on this essay…but I really don’t think it deserves it, especially reading it again.</p>

<p>ESSAY PROMPT
Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment:</p>

<p>We are very individually oriented. We see everything in terms of personal independence, personal pleasure, personal fulfillment. “Do your own thing,” we say. The idea that people can actually do things for someone or something else–a community, a school, or any other group–is lost. It is important to realize, however, that all people are interconnected. We cannot survive without each other. Adapted from Willard Gaylin in Bill Moyers, A World of Ideas</p>

<p>ASSIGNMENT: Do people put too much emphasis on doing things by and for themselves? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<pre><code>In modern times, everything is individual: school, jobs, wealth. Teamwork has been lost. But in other societies this is not the case because of their lifestyles. Western society does put an emphasis on the individual, but it is essential to the survival of society.
One example of the extreme loss of the individual is socialism, not Communism. In socialism, everyone, no matter who they are or what they do, gets to share and own everything. When this was attempted in small colonies in Europe, at first it seemed like socialism was a success. Later, the colonies discovered the truth: humans, as a whole, are selfish. Colonialism and imperialism shows that mankind is narcissistic. Europe put themselves above whole continents like South America. In the socialist colonies the people became lazy since work offered no rewards, nothing to get them above everyone else. The people wanted to feel different and special. If society loses the distinction of the individual, then society will fall. Productivity would be lost. Advances would not be made. Society will become like Rome when their empire fell with more holidays than working days. The individual is very important.
Ayn Rand, in her novel Anthem, develops the idea of the importance of the individual. The protagonist struggles to escape from a society that is ultraconformist. Society tells him that his job is to clean the streets. He tells himself that his job is to learn, to clean and remove his lack of knowledge. For this, society shuns him. They see him as the one misfiring brain cell in what seems to be fully functional organism. Society performs surgery to remove this irregularity. Not only does the protagonist survive, he thrives. Separated from the organism, society, he is able to achieve his whole potential. No one is holding him back. It is similar to a zombie movie in which the heroes try to kill the zombie. They chop off its arm, but the arm keeps moving. Once free, the protagonist makes many scientific discoveries like the different colors of while light. These discoveries could advance his society but they refuse to trust an individual. Again, the loss of the individual is extremely detrimental to society.
To the people of a certain society, their culture and lifestyle with that society is essential to their beings, like food, water, and air. If society crumbles, what is next? When a society loses sight of that fact that the individual is necessary to society’s survival, they fall apart from the inside. Without key individuals like Newton, Einstein, Bach, and Beethoven, where would western society be today? Advances are made by the individual. Humanity is made of groups of individuals. To lose sight of that is a death sentence of death by slow, agonizing laziness and lethargy. People put the right amount of emphasis on doing things by and for themselves.
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