Someone please critique my first and only essay!!

<p>This essay is on a topic of my choice and it is specifically written for NYU. The only person to look it over so far is my mom and I really need other opinions/feedback! </p>

<p>The deadline is January 1st so I need someone who can look it over soon.
I will also be using it for two other colleges with later deadlines.</p>

<p>Post here if you can help! Thanks!!</p>

<p>i can if you want
i’m not applying to NYU</p>

<p>ok I pmed it to you</p>

<p>Any other takers?</p>

<p>i can read it. i submitted my nyu essays yesterday</p>

<p>ill read it, no NYU for me</p>

<p>i was going to, but applying to columbia in new york instead
pm me if you want to.</p>

<p>bumpp…</p>

<p>Anyone else who can get back to me within the next two days?</p>

<p>send it over and i’ll give it back to u 30 mins flat</p>

<p>Sure. PM me. Good luck with the deadline!</p>

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<p>bumppp…
please help!</p>

<p>Anyone else?</p>

<p>This is for NYU</p>

<p>I can give you content feedback in 10-15 min if you like (09’er, not applying to NYU).</p>

<p>sure, pm me.</p>

<p>i’ll read it, i’m not applying to NYU</p>