Someone Please Grade My SAT Practice Test Essay

Assignment: Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?

Changes that make our lives easier do not necessarily make them better. Several literary works and studies have shown that changes that simplify our lives do not always produce better effects.

In his novel “Impact of Technology Today,” George Waldroph mentions how technology has facilitated our lives. However, George then mentions that this technology has brought about many harms, including cyberbullying and pornography. Thus, George believes that although technology is very beneficial to humankind, it also has its harms to the society abroad.

A couple of years ago, the principal of a school in Stonybrook amended one of the school policies, which stated that the students should wear a uniform when going to school. The principal, John Elder, thought that students would perform better if they were allowed to dress up in any type of attire they desire. However, after the policy was altered, the students began dressing up in inappropriate outfits, which led to many other bad actions. Therefore, John Elder had to return the policy to its original condition.

Jake Lander, a psychologist who studied how students’ scores are affected when given different test formats, wrote in his book “Proper Test Formats” that students should be given tests that have the same format because their brain cells will register that specific test format and allow them to achieve a great score. Jake Lander also mentioned that if the test format is altered, students may then get lower scores.

Technological advancements and policy and test amendments can often produce many harms. Hence, we should restrain ourselves from these changes that make our lives laborious.

Connect your examples to your thesis. EXPLAIN them. Right now you just place an example on the table, we stare at it, you say nothing, and then you move on. WHY does this prove your point?

Your intro and conclusion could also be a lot less basic.

So what score would you give it.

I don’t understand why people think the score is so important. I’m not from CollegeBoard. I won’t be grading your essay. Why does my arbitrary number matter? If I give it a 1, will you then look at the advice above, which is less subjective?

Then here’s my completely made-up number: 6.

As @bodangles said, your examples aren’t really proving your point. Does advanced technology actually make our life easier and also make our life worse? Does the change to school uniforms make our lives easier? I’m not even sure what point you’re trying to make in the paragraph about test formats.

Are you saying we should all elect the easy route, even though your examples and opening indicate otherwise?

If I had to, I’d probably give it a 6/12 at most.

@bodangles‌ The only reason I wanted a score was that so I could evaluate my overall SAT Practice Test score… Sorry if I annoyed you.

Not annoyed, sorry if I came off that way! I did respond pretty harshly. I just meant that in my opinion, the constructive criticism is the important part. A random number from someone on the Internet doesn’t mean a whole lot if they don’t know the grading (which I don’t, what apparently gets an 11 is incomprehensible to me).

K, thanks for the criticism. The whole time I thought you were an SAT Essay Grader because I saw your reply on many threads. Oh well, thanks anyway. Good luck.

Just someone who likes grammar!

hmmmm… mkay cool.