SAT Essay (LAST one I promise)

<p>Calling all essay gurus one last time. Please grade on 1-6 SAT scale. Thanks!</p>

<p>Prompt: CollegeBoard Offical SAT Book #2
Quote about technology making life easier but making us feel rushed.
Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?</p>

<p>Response:</p>

<p>In the modern era, technology, inventions, and other time-saving devices seem almost ubiquitous. New gadgets or improvements on already existing technologies flood the marketplace and are becoming increasingly accessible to people everywhere. Nonetheless, many people still express concerns that although modern technology can make life easier, it is alos depriving humans of fundamental experiences by making life feel rushed and superficial. From both personal experiences and an examination of historical occurrences, I believe that there is truth in the assertion that even though technology makes our lives easier, it does not necessarily make them better.</p>

<p>In my own academic studies, I have encountered several examples of how technology can make our lives easier but not better. The best example of this came in my studies of mathematics, where the use of complex, advanced calculators is now prevalent. In today's math courses, almost everyone relies on a calculator to perform advanced operations, and many students have even come to depend on the calculator for simple, basic math. While this development has certainly made calculations faster and easier, it has also impeded the development of a thorough understanding of mathematical principles. Modern students often simply input numbers into the calculator and await an answer, without fully understanding the computations that are necessary. Without the calculator, many such students would be helpless. Thus, it is clear that in this instance, technology has made life easier but also led to a decrease in actual understanding and ability.</p>

<p>Technologies less positive effects can also be seen in a historical context through the development of television and computer. Both of these devices not only save time but also provide exposure to information or entertainment that might otherwise be unavailable. In the modern world, breaking news or communication with people across the globe can be accessed with the push of a button. However, life with other forms of technology, these inventions have had negative effects on society. As a result of the proliferation of such devices, many humans have transitioned from active to sedentary lifestyles. People of this generation are less apt to go to the library and more likely to sit at home all day browsing the Internet. This shift has caused people to become more isolated and less healthy, proving once again that not all technological improvements actually make life better.</p>

<p>As humans continue to explore, develop, and bring new ideas to light, technology will no doubt expand and make our lives easier and faster every day. However, this advancement must come with a caveat: an easier and faster-paced life is not always a better one.</p>

<p>Whew! Thanks for reading! Also, for anyone who has also read the other 2 practice essays I (azulpanties) have posted in the last few days, do you think I'm improving? Thanks.</p>

<p>good. kind of a wordy intro.. you repeat the meaning of the quote (your explanation of the quote). I'd have to actually see the quote to see if you are repeating it. good body.</p>

<p>That was really good. Except I didn't recognize what your thesis was. It didn't seem like you restated it, as you're supposed to, in the conclusion. Also, you're usually supposed to have three body paragraphs, and you only have two.</p>

<p>anyone want to grade on 1-6 scale?</p>

<p>at least a 5...good chance at a 6. you did a good job.</p>

<p>5, because of the composition. But I don't know if that matters much, so maybe even 6.</p>

<p>by composition do u mean the 2 body paragraphs instead of 3? I didn't think we needed 3 since usually 2 examples are enough and then it's just 1 example per body paragraph.</p>

<p>Yeah, that and the thesis part. You may be right about the necessity of three (or lack thereof). Honestly, I don't know how the SAT grades it, but I do know that in general, writing essays are supposed to have three body paragraphs. I was assuming the SAT uses the general essay format guidelines. You might wanna check up on the advice/guidelines they give. I was always told essays should be:</p>

<p>Intro
Body 1
Body 2
Body 3
Conclusion</p>

<p>You don't need 3 body paragraohs. My friends did 2 and got 12s. People have had 1 and gotten 12s.</p>