the dumbest essay you'll ever read guaranteed!

Haha, that title rhymed.

Anyways, I’m in a huge quagmire…

Firstly, I think I am a pretty good writer but that only goes as far as literary essays. So far, I’m really overwhelmed with college essays. I’ve written numerous drafts and each one sounds more juvenile and less-engaging than the previous draft.

I am in desperate need of an informed opinion, however, I don’t feel secure in just posting my essay here, would any trustworthy person be willing to look at my immature sounding draft through Private Message? I would really appreciate it… I have like writer’s block or something and I can’t articulate!! It’s frustrating.

By the way, this essay is for UC’s, practically the only schools I’m applying to. The 2nd question (tell us about a talent, interest, personality quality that you will bring to the school). I haven’t even touched on the 2 200 word ones since I can’t even get past the 600 word one.

AWWW I hate this, too bad college essays carry so much weight and they need to somehow makeup for my inadequacies [my dream school is UCSD and I only have 3.7 or so UC gpa, 660v630m, 660writing (still haven’t gotten new csores), 650us history, 640lit, 580math(ugh…i hope i did better in friday’s batch of scores)…so as you can see, i’m slightly below average for ucsd and i know there’s only a sliver of hope for me but i’m holding on and i need your help!]

<ol>
<li>See your English treacher for help.</li>
<li>Get "On Writing the College Admissions Essay" by Harry Bauld</li>
<li>Forget that this is a college essay. It is a PERSONAL essay. You are writing this for yourself, not for Harvard Schmarvard University or whatever.</li>
</ol>

<p>wait, is that yo're essay?</p>

<p>haha what?</p>

<p>sorry i'm asking for someone to read my essay and i'll pm it to them...</p>

<p>Approach the college essay as less of a formal essay and have fun with it, however don't forget the importance. I think your biggest problem is you might be blowing these essays out of proportion. After you write a carefree first draft go back and make formal revisions. And yes, see a teacher or other mentor for help. Good luck!</p>

<p>Thanks for the advice everybody.</p>

<p>My English teachers and counselors are all a bit swamped and because smart ole' me decided to procrastinate.</p>

<p>Mauiboy: yes I am blowing these kind of out of proportion, I need to take a deep breath! thanks</p>

<p>Anyways, any kind souls out there to volunteer to read an essay?????</p>

<p>bump bump bump, again I reiterate, any kind souls out there to volunteer to read an essay?????</p>