<p>^Your penn essay is very poetic. However, there may be too much “fluff” in it and not enough substance. Nevertheless, it is really good.</p>
<p>I know 
You’re definitely right.</p>
<p>Hasdrubal!</p>
<p>Special! Special! Everyone is special chanted the affable, purple dinosaur, as I sat intently
poised with my eyes glued on the TV. I was a mere child and there isnt much I can recall from the
time of my life where being potty trained was an accomplishment, but Barney, with his redundant
chant, has engraved one thing into my mind which Ill always remember: Everyone is special! In
order to stay true to my childhood hero, I have found many interests that I can contribute to Penn, for
the variety in my interests is what defines me as special. However, there are two central interests that I
believe to bear the most weight on my scale: religion and my future. My world has always revolved
around the gravity of these factors, as they encompass the driving force which makes every day in my
life, a day to be lived to the fullest. So what can my interests contribute? I believe my interests can
especially add a distinct flavor to Penn and its communities due to my experiences and goals.
Deeming my religion, Shia Ismaili Islam, as merely an interest would be a tremendous
understatement as it is the most important factor in my life. Unfortunately, my religion has fallen
victim to the deadliest weapon humans are capable of wielding: ignorance. I have made it a goal to do
anything within my capacity to portray the true face of Islam: a face of peace and brotherhood and
servitude and morality and piety. The struggle against ignorance has been an arduous war, yet I have
combated this evil with several community outreach projects, such as my Eagle Scout Project and
leading a Red Cross youth volunteer group from my Jamat Khana (my house of worship). However,
my single most significant blow to this fortress of ignorance was exemplified by my statements to a
reporter from TIME Magazine. I expressed how it felt to be a Muslim Boy Scout, a target of hatred for
some scouts, despite our brotherhood. I spoke from the heart and later found myself quoted in TIME
Magazines August 29th, 2005 issue. With this effort, I had helped to wipe away some of the grime on
Islam to show the entire nation, and possibly even the world, a glimpse of its true face. I would like to
persist in these efforts at Penn and Im elated that the institution has a Muslim Students Association
(MSA) which I have partaken in throughout high school as well. I will dedicate my efforts to Islamic
ambassadorship and enrich the communitys perspective on Penn and its MSA by taking initiative
through outreaching service efforts as I have in the past. Perhaps one day understanding will dethrone
ignorance and its monarchy on the worlds view of Islam.
Whether interning in the lively jam-packed facilities of MD Andersons MRI unit which is the
number one cancer care center in the nation, interning at Air Liquides offices as a computer
programmer, or familiarizing with medicine in Hightowers Medical Science Academy courses, I have
had in depth experiences with technology and the field of medicine that have advanced my perspective
beyond that of the typical high school graduate. As a high school student I have been involved in
career related extracurricular activities, but they barely allowed me to dip my foot into the sea of
knowledge which Penn will allow me to delve into head first. With this dive at Penn, I will have the
opportunity to join Penns Biotech Group (PBG) which is much more interest specific than the general
interest organizations of high school. By joining a group like the PBG I can not only share my thirst for
knowledge but also my experiences from past opportunities. Biomedical engineering captures my
various interests in a single field and provides opportunity to accelerate human welfare: With better
medical technology will come better healthcare. With better health care will come improved lives.
With improved lives will come a safer world. As biomedical engineering is the modern Gold Rush of
opportunity and as Penn is an already eminent figure in its expansion, it would be an impressive
prospect to abet Penn in an endeavor to broaden the horizons of this expanding field. I would input my
experiences, interest and dedication for the success of the PGB and Penn as a whole.
Just as Benjamin Franklin exemplified his brotherly love to the city of Philadelphia through
his implementation of smaller contributive communities, I will strive to do my best for the betterment
of the University of Pennsylvania as a whole by engaging in these smaller communities such as the
MSA and PBG. I hope one day itll be my smiling face, with a pair of bifocals perched on my nose,
depicted smack in the middle of a hundred dollar bill. So its time to make Barney proud by being
special.</p>
<p>above is mine, tell me what u guys think 
i heard Penn gives a lot of emphasis on essays?</p>
<p>hey everyone
i was admitted ED and i just wanted to say good luck tomorrow!!! you all will do fantastic things!!! take a lot of deep breaths and eat some chocolate!!!</p>
<p>Guys I’m freeking out… Accepted to brandeis but don’t think nyu… I took act in october felt so sik and just bubbleed randon bubbles in to leave … Got a 21 but I had a 2110 on sat but will penn not take me because of the 21 I think nyu did that… I just tried so hard on the essays I’m freaking out I want penn so bad</p>
<p>if you got a 2110 on the sat, colleges are going to know that something was up when you took the act. they’re not going to reject you because of that - don’t worry, really. i got deferred from penn with a 1720 sat. my friend got rejected with a 2000+. it’s proof that scores aren’t everything. if you’re application is strong overall you will be fine. good luck with penn and nyu.</p>
<p>good point acf! and plus, people get accepted to Penn because of the aspects of their app’s that stand out – most of the time, these parts have nothing to do with your scores.</p>
<p>Here’s my page 217, please let me know what you think!
Chapter 14: Summer 2008
“During the summer months of 2008, my family and I took a vacation to xxxxxx, in hopes of relaxation and of having my younger sister and me appreciate our heritage more.
While I did enjoy myself, I saw my time in xxxxxx as yet another way to push myself to gain more knowledge about the world. As such, I wanted to learn more about the cross-cultural differences between the United States and xxxxxxx.
While dining at a McDonald’s near our temporary residence sometime in early August, I noticed sharp contrasts between patrons in xxxxx and those in America. I was surprised to discover that even though corporations like McDonald’s claim their food is the same across the globe, the types of consumers varied widely. For example, I observed that typically, there were very few elderly people present at fast-food establishments in xxxxxx, while teenagers and young adults were most prevalent.
What’s more, I noticed several of these young people were either studying from books they had on the tables, or have already been finished eating for over an hour and were sitting to engage in more conversation. These observations led me to theorize that young xxxxxx people were not merely eating for the food, but they were also there to socialize and study in the calm environment.
Over the course of the next few days, I began visiting a variety of American fast-food establishments in xxxxxx, including Kentucky Fried Chicken, Burger King, and McDonald’s.
Most of my time was spent conversing with locals; I became very intrigued by the cultural differences between Americans and the xxxxxxxxx that manifest themselves in something as mundane as fast-food, so I purchased some notebooks and recorded information the locals told me.
I created my own interview questions, posed them to a few natives and, after nearly a week of frequenting the American eating establishments, I began to draw my conclusions. I learned that in general, young people in xxxxxxxx are more adaptable to change, and they highly admire American customs. On the other hand, older people prefer established traditions and are more hesitant to alter their eating habits. In addition, I observed that prices in McDonald’s and other such chains were well above the prices of food in traditional xxxxxx restaurants. I asked a few students what they thought, and they agreed the food was extremely expensive and that they came mostly to socialize.
After arriving back at my home in xxxxxxxx, I began to examine my notes and saw the potential for an interesting newspaper article. Before school started, I worked tirelessly on revising the information I obtained while abroad to turn it into a coherent and informative article. When I was finally finished, I submitted my work to First name Last name, editor of Newspaper Name goes here. We exchanged several e-mails, and I continued to edit my article as per her suggestions. At long last, on Wednesday, September 3rd, 2008, “Article Title” was finally
published.”
As Excerpted From Shifting Perspectives: An Autobiography. Page 217, ©2027 Last Name, First. Shifting Perspectives: An Autobiography. Bedlinog, Wales: Accent Press, 2027. Print.</p>
<p>Oh, and this isn’t mine, but it is incredibly good:</p>
<p>Page 217 (Optional)</p>
<p>sprawled out on a futon and laid my crossword puzzle on an adjacent three legged coffee table. My friends find it odd that none of my furniture has four legs; I find it odd that none of theirs has three. Three legs are just as stable four, the only difference being the price. Years ago, I stumbled upon a quaint little pawn shop on Mass. Ave that, after much bargaining, sold me a three-legged set of furniture for 25% off. Quite a deal, indeed.
I again reached toward my coffee table, this time picking up a red ballpoint pen and a pad of yellow lined paper. Then scribbling down some numbers, I divided by zero.</p>
<p>It’s really a neat trick. During my long metro rides home, I’ll pull out a piece of scrap paper and pass the time by dividing numbers by zero, chuckling to myself as fellow commuters look on with bewilderment. But I pretend not to notice. Sometimes when I go to my neighbor’s wine and cheese parties, I’ll bring along a small pad of paper to liven things up. While guests are nibbling on wedges of Roquefort and sipping vintage port wines, I’ll be busy gathering an audience around an uninhabited corner of the apartment. By the time I actually finish dividing by zero, gasps of disbelief fill the room as spectators are unsure whether to harbor feelings of deep terror or unbounded respect. I just smile. Usually, a member of the audience will scream in pain as his head implodes, collapsing upon itself like a super massive black hole from a sheer inability to comprehend such a concept. The crowd is whipped into a frenzy and cries are made for medical assistance. I still just smile. 1/x is now a continuous graph. I have disproved the entire operation of limits and consequently the branch of mathematics known as Calculus. I’ve been urged to publish my findings in obscure math periodicals; however, why bother when I’m having so much fun at these wine and cheese parties? A magician never reveals his secret. 5/0 is 2. Give me a pen and paper and I’ll prove it.</p>
<p>Chapter 13</p>
<p>People call me Superman, but please, just call me super. I hate the crime-fighting implications that such a title carries. I don’t want to come off as arrogant, but I am a big deal. There, I just did it again. I can’t stop myself! But at this rate, why would I want to?</p>
<p>My neighbor hates me, but he is yet to ban me from one of his wine and cheese gatherings, so I will continue making appearances until my presence is unwelcome. I think, deep down inside, he is grateful that I liven them up. He’s not the kind of guy I would imagine</p>
<p>belongs to nobromo, a current Penn student. He posted this after being accepted ED.</p>
<p>acf236, you said you were deferred and your friend rejected. Were you both about equal in stats or were your stats better?</p>
<p>raffles - i got a 1720, my friend got something above 2000 (not sure of the exact score) they also had higher grades AND a legacy, but i have really strong and unique EC’s and essays. my friend had good grades but wasn’t involved in a lot. i guess it was enough to make up for my low scores compared to everyone else?</p>
<p>waitlisted. </3 sooo sad.</p>