UC Essay...Prompt #1

College Essays
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<p>Prompt #1 (freshman applicants)
Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>

<p>over 500ish words. not heavily edited yet. rough, ROUGH draft. grammar corrections . after some corrections, going to give it to my counselor and english teacher to edit and critique. </p>

<p>i wrote about family in a sort of narrative fashion. need suggestions!</p>

<p>if anybody has time or would enjoy reading my essay and helping me improve it, please PM me for the essay. Thanks again CC!</p>

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<p>Sure. I'll edit in morning. =] And I did something similar when I wrote mine. So, I might be able to help more than usual. PM it!</p>

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<p>If your comfortable, PM it to me and I'll try to help.</p>

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<p>thanks nic. i sent it by PM to you. along with asdfjk.</p>