UC Personal Statement Idea, Yes or No?

College Essays
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<p>So, the first prompt for the UC personal statement is as follows: "Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations."</p>

<p>For this, I really want to write about my best friend's anorexia, and how it has shaped my world. It's shaped my world, because it led me to have a passion for researching psychological and neurological diseases, and has inspired me to want to become a neurological psychologist, and specifically study eating disorders. I plan on writing a lot about her story, and how it has affected me along the way, what I have done because of it, and how it helped me grow.</p>

<p>Do you think this is a good approach to take? Or should I make it more PERSONAL? What should I add to develop this idea?</p>

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<p>I think this world be fine, as long as you don’t spend too much of it telling her story. Focus on how it affected you, and what your goals are in the future. I think it’s personal enough, because it’s something that really did have an effect on you. Good luck with it :)</p>

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<p>^ I totally agree.</p>

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<p>Show, dont tell , that’s the key!</p>

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<p>I don’t see this as the world you come from. I do see how it is a strong influence to your aspirations. But I think it is a mistake to ‘plan on writing a lot about her story’ when they are asking for yours.</p>