<p>This essay needs a lot of work. First off, avoid cliches such as: each and everyday, live up to my potential. Statements like these make your essay generic. Also, there are a lot of grammar issues, mainly subject verb agreement. A great example would be your opening sentence to your second paragraph, Some major obstacles that I face throughout most of my life is coming from a family who own a business. I suggest you start over, pick one thing that has affected you, such as what is it like coming from non-English speaking background, or what it is like coming from a family that owns a business. What is significant? In any case, if you choose to stay with this essay, good luck. You’ll need it. </p>
<p>Basically, choose one topic and start over. At least you still have a couple days.</p>