<p>This essay is NOT a good essay, please judge it honestly....thx</p>
<p>"A mistakenly cynical view of human behavior holds that people are primarily driven by selfish motives: the desire for wealth, for power, or for fame. Yet history gives us many examples individuals who have sacrificed their own welfare for a cause or a principle that they regarded as more important than their own lives. Conscience - that powerful inner voice that tells us what is right and what is wrong- can be a more compelling force than money, power, or fame"</p>
<p>"Is Conscience a more poweful motivator than money, fame, or power? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples takenn from your reading, studies, experiences, or observations.</p>
<p>The lust for power, fame and wealth can often be motivations for a person, even a society, however, conscience can cause a person to contradict the selfish deeds for a better cause, or even a principle.</p>
<p>I personally have a similiar experience, for three years, i have been saving up for a car. When I finally had the amount of money I needed to buy the car, I realized that having a car can only benefit myself, however, if I donated the money, the money could be put to a better use. Therefore, I gave up the desire of buying a car, and donated the money to a local charity foundation. By donating the money, I believe that my conscience had overdriven the desire for wealth.</p>
<p>While many people are able to give up their wealth for their conscience deeds, others are able to risk their lives for their principles and causes. The can best be seen on September 11th of 2001, when hundreds of firefighters had saved more than hundreds of lives from the World Trade Center buildings. During that grievious day, hundreds of firefighters had fallen, yet their honorable actions are a symbol of conscience defeating personal desires. They had couragiously given up their lives to help the public that not everyone can imagine.</p>
<p>In today's society, greed can often be seen as the strongest motivation of all, however, many people are unaware that our consciences play a significant role in our lives. If one observes carefully, the examples can be seen everywhere.</p>
<p>the essay is 8 lines from the end, which is around 1 page and a half and a little over.</p>
<p>please evaluate it, so i can know how well i do and what i need to improve on</p>