<p>An essay on pg.217/300 about a fantasy like graduating from wharton and beign rich and living the good life after wharton opened up opportunities?</p>
<p>or </p>
<p>a heartfelt essay on how seeing poverty motivated me to work hard towards financial success?</p>
<p>The second.</p>
<p>did you submit your app already?!?</p>
<p>no, but could you answer the question?</p>
<p>The second.</p>
<p>Definitely the second. It's not even close.</p>
<h1>2 - especially if you can work in something about working to help people like those whom you saw.</h1>
<p>k thanks alot guys</p>
<p>the second one most def., but when are you applying? didn't the deadline pass?</p>
<h1>1 is just horrendous, no matter how you write about it.</h1>
<h1>2 could end up being just as horrible, depending on how you depict it. Don't try so hard to play up the Wharton financial-ness. My essay had nothing to do with business.</h1>
<p>They both sound kind of terrible. The first one is plain superficial and the second is elitist. Plus, after reading #2 I would wonder why witnessing poverty doesn't inspire you to help others, not just yourself. Unless you meant "experiencing" poverty, not "seeing" it. Even then, it sounds like you only want to pursue business for the money. I guess I can't argue with that too much because Wharton's full of those kinds, but I'm assuming they didn't write essays about it.</p>
<p>Both topics treat college as a stepping stone to fortune. Whether that fortune is motivated by wanting to be rich or not wanting to be poor doesn't really matter. You (should) go to a particular college because it will help you grow and foster your academic ambitions.</p>
<p>i meant gaining fortune to be philanthropic and giving back to the poor. as in witnessing poverty motivated me to achieve success such that I could help the poor financially.</p>
<p>if you can discuss specific programs / professors / aspects of wharton and penn that can prepare you to help in the future (microfinance efforts, etc.), that would also add to the essay.</p>
<p>Your probably best off using your page 217 essay to recollect on an event that already happened in your life that somehow defines you or has had a great impact on your life. It is tougher to show your personality through a future fictitious event than through something that happened in your actual life.</p>
<p>well let's just say that im writing this essay based on something i've already experienced in a 3rd world country</p>
<p>There's something inherently shady about saying you want to help others by making money for yourself first. That kind of experience should be saved to explain why you want to be a public defender or work with DWB or something. Otherwise it isn't a believable story.</p>
<p>Both essays are rather cliched.</p>
<p>yeah but a lot of essays are bound to be cliched......</p>
<p>..weird topics</p>
<p>a lot of people have $ on the mind when they apply to wharton, but don't put that in the essay! they are looking for people who love learning, natural leaders,
and lastly people who are mature enough for a rigorous business education. I would feel a lot more comfortable rejecting some kid who only cares about getting rich than I would rejecting a kid who wrote overcoming real obstacles and accomplishing meaningful things.</p>