Beforehand, here’s Topic A if you’re not from Texas: What was the environment in which you were raised? Describe your family, home, neighborhood or community, and explain how it has shaped you as a person.
Basically, I have a draft but I’m worried that it’s weak and may not even address the prompt completely. I wrote about how a while back, one of my dogs got bit and nearly died but survived and also how my other dog went missing for like four months and miraculously came back. I attempted at tying it back to how it shaped me as a person by saying that “they helped me fully understand the power of prayer.” Basically, how those two events strengthened my faith.
Going back to the ApplyTexas prompt, I’m afraid that I’ve got to scratch this essay and rewrite an entirely new one from scratch. Is this the case?
You have a very limited number of words in which to convince them that you’re the right applicant for a limited number of seats. It sounds like you’ve spent a LOT Of those words on your dogs.
I would rewrite, and spend far more words on the applicant.
I agree that your essay does not really address the prompt. It sounds as though this is something that matters to you, but I don’t see how this is about how your home environment shaped you. It’s more about how these upsetting events involving your dogs shaped you.
If you don’t have another topic, can you focus more on how faith factored into your upbringing, and how it played a role in your responses to these events? That way it would be about you and the parts about the dogs would just be a way of illustrating how faith factored in.
Maybe you could talk about trying to find your dogs/whatever the dog story is, but also tie in details about your neighborhood, your family, etc. When you’re looking for your dog you can describe the town and the people living in it. Maybe your family had to band together to find him or maybe losing the dog brought out certain dynamics in your family. If you choose this story, don’t just talk about the dogs. Talk about what the committee wants to hear,
