Would anybody be willing to critique my essay?

Applying to College Common and Coalition Application
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<p>I'll PM you if you're up for it. This is my second or third draft. There are still a few things I'm considering changing (I'll highlight that in the message), but I'm more interested in holistic feedback. </p>

<p>Thank you so much!</p>

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<p>Send it over in a PM</p>

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<p>pm itjsaodfj</p>

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<p>I’ll proofread it for you; PM it to me.</p>

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<p>You can send it to me</p>

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<p>I’ll read it if you still need it!</p>

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<p>I’ll read it, jsut PM me :)</p>

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<p>sure no problem!</p>

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<p>pm it over :)</p>