Would you please score my essay?

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<p>Hi, there. I am a student from Buenos Aires, Argentina, and I am giving the SAT this Saturday. Unluckily for me, there doesn't seem to be many SAT professors around here, and I know sending this essay to a Language professor would be useless for SAT purposes. Would you please score my essay? I wrote it by hand in 25 minutes.</p>

<p>The prompt is the following (first mock test, Princeton Review book):
Can the daily actions of average people have a significant impact on the course of history?</p>

<p>Skeptical people may say that one person cannot change the world. However, there are many examples in recent history which demonstrate that this belief is erroneous. Each person has an immense capacity to do great things in the world.</p>

<p>An example which largely illustrates this is the life and actions of Mother Teresa of Calcuta. Mother Teresa was educated in a religious school near where she lived, and came from a humble background. In short, she had no contacts or significant material resources whatsoever which might have helped her become the legend she is today. At those times, nobody would have guessed that that young, na</p>

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<p>Solid 5. I wouldn’t be surprised if you got an 11. I think you need to show why your examples prove you are right, though. I need to hear more about how MT’s actions impacted the course of history, or rather, how history would have been different without her everyday actions. Same with AH.</p>

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<p>Solid 11/12. But I was baffled by the conclusion. I have never encountered this type. Is this ok?</p>

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<p>Thanks guys, that was really helpful. I think you are right, the conclusion’s kind of weak, even aggressive. I probably should have used it for explaining how my examples related to the topic.</p>

<p>Thanks a million!</p>