Can anyone look over my essay to the first prompt of the UC essays?

College Essays
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<p>Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>

<p>This one.</p>

<p>Post here and I'll PM you.</p>

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<p>I'll check it out</p>

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<p>Anyone else, I'm still debating whether or not to completely scrap my essay and redo it.</p>

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<p>Please</p>

<p>10 char</p>

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<p>IDK how much help I can give but I'll read it.</p>