Can you Final check my UC essays,please

<p>Hello, I've finally written my essays and it would be really useful if you check them before I finally submit them. Thanks!
1.Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school
— and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations. </p>

<p>School teachers, friends, and family members, all have had a huge influence in shaping my dreams and aspirations. Still, I think the most enjoyable and educating part of my life was participation in various entrepreneurship, startup events and hackathons. All of which helped to define me and focus the direction of my future studies and motivated me to select Physics and Computer Sciences as my majors.</p>

<p>However, factors such as distance from home and being alone in a new place scared me from taking the steps needed to make my dream come true. All of that changed in 2012 when in “Silicon Valley Comes to the Baltics conference” I heard a speech by Gigi Wang a board member from MIT/Stanford Venture Lab.</p>

<p>In her speech, Wang discussed the importance of sharing ideas between businesses and establishing your own companies. She noted that in order be successful, people have to leave their comfort zones and do something they are not used to doing. Wang said that when she had been younger she had asked her mentor what she needed to do to grow in her career, he replied "You need to get out of your comfort zone." It was then I realized, traveling to new places, meeting new people and experiencing new things is a great way to push your life beyond the limits.</p>

<p>Those words inspired me to prepare for my SAT exams, to take them and apply to the University of California. Although the distance between Vilnius and San Francisco is just under six thousand miles, I am more excited about the opportunities ahead rather than the distance in between. I have realized that I must overcome the difficulties and try to reach my goal - education in the United States. Conferences like “Silicon Valley Comes to Baltics” proved to me that if you want, everything is possible. I have realized that my dreams which I thought are unrealistic one day may actually come true. </p>

<p>If not for the many entrepreneurship, startups events, hackathons and the people who I met along the way, I would not be who I am today. Now I know that every time I face difficulties in my life I must overcome them and try to reach my goal.</p>

<p>2."Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?" </p>

<p>A clock is ticking on the wall, counting the last ten minutes to submit our application. Something went wrong- the screen of the application is blank and all seems completely ruined for our team. The manager announces that the presentation of apps is upcoming in five minutes, we still can not find the bug, so we are trying to find our mistake by randomly changing code. Luckily, we find out what is wrong and submit our final application just couple of minutes before the final deadline. The relief and joyfulness in my face is so big that I forget to prepare my speech for presenting our application. Despite that, the presentation succeeds and everyone is happy with our result.</p>

<p>These are the moments from the “Wix Hackathon”, in which me and my friends were participating to develop the Skype Widget for Wix App store. We were the youngest participants there. Nevertheless, we proved that we can make applications as good as graduates of computer science. Creating that application was not something like a big accomplishment for me, but seeing Wix employees who congratulated and encouraged us telling that despite of being very young as well as other more professional participants and ensured us that couple of years later we will hopefully create own startups. It really made us feel proud of our work.</p>

<p>When I registered to the Wix Hackathon, all I knew was a little background in programming that I learned at school or at home —some C++, Java, HTML and CSS. However,In the event we had to create a web application and no one from my team had had a background in web development before. So, in two days period, during which we coded the application, I have learned much more about creating web applications than I could learn in a month if studying by myself. Our team was consisted from only three persons so I had a great chance to express myself in different areas: from coding the application to marketing it and creating its logo. The period of two days was a really short time for developing an application, so we had to rush all the time, not having much time for relaxation. The constant hurry and adrenaline really motivated me to try harder and achieve what firstly seemed to be almost impossible - to create a full working application. Luckily, I achieved my goal and I felt really proud of it.</p>

<p>I find this quite parallel to my life. I always try to create goals, which would be challenges to complete and love working forwards achieving them. When I read or hear about some new technologies, I always try to experiment with them in spite of that I am not well knowledgeable about them. Teamwork is also very important for me, because there people complement each other, and by doing that they can achieve significant results.</p>

<p>For the first essay
Grammar/Spelling: *Third paragraph “She stated that in order to be successful…”
I really like the conclusion of your essay, I just felt that the beginning was more of a resume then something personal. Other than that I like how it got to the point.</p>

<p>For your first essay:
“In her speech, Wang discussed the importance of sharing ideas between businesses and establishing your own companies”
Wang’s speech doesn’t really have anything to do with you! :c The readers don’t care what she thinks, they care what you think. Cut out the fluff.</p>

<p>“Those words inspired me to prepare for my SAT exams, to take them and apply to the University of California.”
Again, you need to do some soul searching here. “I heard inspiring words and they motivated me to work hard” is going to be true for a lot of people. You need more detail- why were they so inspiring? Why did it impact you so much? What process did you use to get out of your comfort zone? You learn by actions, not words, and your essay needs to express that. I know you’re running out of time and the word limit, so just do the best you can. Good luck!</p>