Can youguys grade my essay? :]

<p>This is my second essay to be graded on here. I'm still working on a lot of the things suggested from my previous essay. I'll be writing 2 essays per week and hopefully i can improve a lot. Thanks for all your help!</p>

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<p>Quote:
“We most resent in others he very flaws that we ourselves possess.”</p>

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<p>Assignment:
What are your thought on the statement above? Do you agree or disagree with the writer’s assertion? Compose an essay in which you express your views on this topic. Your essay may support, refute, or qualify the view expressed in the statement. What you write, however, must be relevant to the topic under discussion. Additionally, you must support your viewpoint, indicating your reasoning and providing examples based on your studies and/or experience.</p>

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<p>Essay:
A flaw is something every person possesses. It is not something that we want. We constantly try to leave them behind, in an effort to ascend as a better person. The impossibility of escaping these flaws can drive a person crazy. In a constant fit of frustration we end up hating our own flaws as to see them as inappropriate and direful on anybody.</p>

<p>A flaw accentuates a person’s weak point, sometimes exposing multiple weak points. The self-conscience and self-respect of a person try to suppress their influence. People try not to remind themselves of his/her flaws but try to focus on the positive. When a person sees the same flaws he/she has, it serves as a constant reminder of his/her own imperfection.</p>

<p>In the book “Things Fall Apart,” the main character, Okonkwo, descents from a drunkard father who bears some of the worst flaws Okonkwo has ever wanted. Fearing that he may have the same despicable problems as his father, Okonkwo looks down on him and vows to be nothing like him. In truth, he understood that everybody have the same flaws. It only depends on whether the person has the dignity and self-control to resist the habit from showing up.</p>

<p>With the above reasoning, it should be noted that this would only be agreeable among people of competition and people who strive to be better. Flaws make people very uncomfortable. Most of us know that. In a competitive world we try to take out the indecencies and obstructions in the way of the ultimate goal. Other people’s flaws remind us that every person has the same flaws. Like Okonkwo from “Things Fall Apart,” the competitive person will change what they despise so much in other people to give themselves an advantage over others. Uncompetitive people just don’t worry about this kind of thing.</p>

<p>But in this world, most people are competitive in one way of another, whether it be hot dog eating contest or professional music audition. We despise the flaws in other that we all possess to make ourselves better people.</p>

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<p>Thank you for reading my essay!</p>

<p>bump? can someone grade my essay? :]</p>

<p>8-10 (4-5 x2) While it is a decent essay, you don’t support your points ala SAT prompt style (also use real SAT prompts next time). I suggest you read How to get a 12 essay in 10 days.</p>