Could someone read mine/ suggest improvements?

College Essays
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<p>Common App Essay.</p>

<p>I've already had my English teacher look over it and fix the grammatical errors.</p>

<p>Unfortunately, it is >1950 words, which is apparently way too much. How to say what I want to say in just 600 words or less is beyond me. </p>

<p>Any help in this department would be appreciated.</p>

<p>I also have a supplement essay, which was supposed to be one page. I wrote 750 words, and scrunched them into one page. Again, brevity is needed.</p>

<p>Thanks.</p>

<p>EDIT:
got the Common App essay down to 1060 words. Cutting off those 900 words was rather difficult.</p>

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<p>no takers, eh?</p>

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<p>I'll read it.</p>

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<p>Sure I can help. I'm working on cutting back my commonapp as well</p>