Do I come off as arrogant? Criticism please!

College Essays
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<p>Hi and thank you for checking out my thread. I threw together a paper in about an hour and had one of my teachers review it. My teacher said the paper was alright, but needed was touch-ups. I fixed it up a bit, then sent it to a current college-student to read. The college student told me that my writing style was strong, but I come off as an arrogant prick and that the paper was horrible. I was strongly advised to scrap the paper and start over with something new. Before I do something so drastic, I'd like to get some other opinions. </p>

<p>The prompt is:
"Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you."</p>

<p>In advance, I know the event isn't too significant or important, but I just wanted something quick and enjoyable to read. Please PM me or post on this thread if you're willing to read my paper. Thanks again!</p>

<p>Oh and in return if there is anything I can to do help you out please let me know.</p>

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<p>I’ll read your paper, pm it to me!</p>

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<p>Thank you very much Rock. I believe I have sent it. If you didn’t get it, please let me know.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it as well if you’d like!</p>

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<p>I’ll read</p>

<p>Sent from my Nexus S 4G using CC</p>

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<p>Wow just wanted to give a big thank you to all of you. Really do appreciate this and I’m stunned by how many helpful individuals have volunteered in such short time.</p>

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<p>I can give it a read if you want. </p>

<p>Also, be careful about randomly sending off your essays to people on the internet. Just a friendly warning.</p>

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<p>I’ll give it a read.</p>

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<p>I’ll give it a read. send away.</p>

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<p>I would love to read it and give as much constructive feedback as I can!</p>

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<p>pm it to me I’ll read it.</p>