essay second draft: feedback wanted!

Applying to College
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<p>hi all. i just spent a long three hours pouring over my essay. I think it has come a long way, and I would GREATLY appreciate any feedback at all. If you're interested in reading it, just respond to this post and I will PM it to you right away. Just FYI, it is one of the two essays I plan on submitting with my early application to yale.</p>

<p>thanks in advance.</p>

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<p>...pretty please :)</p>

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<p>me can read it.</p>

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<p>sure! I'll read it.</p>

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<p>Please PM it to me.</p>

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<p>sent...thanks for the interest!</p>

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<p>I wouldn't mind glancing over it.</p>