<p>If you want to become an expert in a certain field, do you need to have more talent or more motivation?
An expert in a certain field requires more motivation. Motivation is what makes the opprotunities for desires, dreams, and visions of the certain subject. Throughly by motivation, opprotunities help experts train and learn talent. It's usual how they can have last-minute stamina, faster speed, and learn stronger skills because they are inspired. In any way of motivation, anything is comprehensible to an expert.
Motivation is an important abiotic factor for an expert's mind. It's how we learned to keep moving forward for almost every mistake. For example, as an inventor, Thomas Edison made over many mistakes in his inventions. However, he resolved in making those mistakes to preventable solutions because he kept himself moving forward. Mistakes are what clearly motivated him to move onto his solutions. Today, most experts worry too much perfectionism for mistakes dued to expenses, punishment, or failures. Motivation does not require timely consuming perfectionism or talent. What's only needed for them is to keep moving forward.
Struggles and mistakes are the factors and practices in learning talent and skills through our motivations. Sometimes, these factors make us gripe because we either have less patience, or ambition. In life, motivation depends on our deep personalities involving our good wisdom and will. It was how some of us made the quote "to never give up" until what has been achieved. As before, motivation is our hope and inspiration. It gives us a buff to all our attributes.</p>
<p>Im not gonna go on a 1-6 scale, but i will tell you that it seems to lack emotion. Its written like a research paper. It is well written, but not for an admissions essay. Maybe you should write about a time when you have been motivated or motivated someone else</p>
<p>This essay told me nothing about you. </p>
<p>This essay was boring.</p>
<p>This essay could use some better sentence structure.</p>
<p>This essay was forgettable.</p>
<p>This essay, if I had to grade it, would be a 2.</p>
<p>this is like a normal expository essay assignment in school.
You can ask your teacher to mark this and send to colleges as a marked sample 
but definitlely not for commonapp essay.
the essay itself has nothing to do with YOU.
Colleges want to admit you, not motivation.</p>
<p>This looks like a SAT essay.</p>
<p>I honestly couldn’t read the whole thing. It was pretty dull</p>
<p>I’m assuming this is a practice SAT essay. It’s technically(structurally, grammatically) bad and lacks any specific examples. Thus you should expect a 4 out of 12.</p>
<p>Sry if I’m just a novice to SAT, I’m just very theoratical to myself… 
Also, I thought SAT boards don’t want an example of yourself. Their topics want you to describe in idealism.</p>
<p>Oh i think most of the people here thought your essay was a college admissions essay</p>
<p>oh then how would it be as a SAT essay?</p>
<p>It does sound like a SAT essay :/</p>
<p>They want examples from literature, history, or personal experience. They just don’t want hypotheticals like the ones you provided(though you threw in a cursory mention of Edison)</p>
<p>send me it too?</p>