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<p>Topic: If you want to become an expert in a certain field, do you need to have more talent or more motivation?</p>
<p>It is widely accepted that people who are talented in a certain field, can very easily attain the professional skills and expertizing capability in that field. However, there are people who believe in a skewed concept only the people who have talent at certain field can expertize in that field. It seems like motivation is not even considered when a person is trying to become an expert in a field. Interestingly, experiences in my life directly contradict what many people believe. In my experiences, motivation was the most vital factor that contributed to successfully becoming an expert. The motivation enabled two young people, I and Dong-Hyun, to achieve in what they sought.
When I was a child, I was not that much of an athlete. Sports were always something that I considered to do last. Despite my will to stay away from sports, my mother suggested me to practice Tae-Kwon-Do, a Korean military art. I reluctantly decided to try it. At first, I virtually suffered and abhorred to learn it. The harsh exercises and memorization and practice of moves were very hard to endure for a person who did not enjoy sports. After a year had elapsed, I passed the official Tae-Kwon-Do examination and earned a governmental certificate. Before earning the certificate, I never even for one second enjoyed the sport; however as soon as I earned the certificate and found myself recognized by the country, my childish mind easily inverted because of the pride I gained from attaining the certificate. From then, I began to do my best to earn higher certificate. Because I was not a talented sports-wise, I had to put in extra effort to be as good as others and even more strive to be better than others. This motivation was prized after 3 years of practice. I was able to win 3 gold medals from Tae-Kwon-Do competitions and earn higher certificate.
One of my friends who learned Tae-Kwon-Do with me was Dong-Hyun. He was very talented in sports. He was able to play every sport better than anyone else, and Tae-Kwon-Do was not an exception for him. After practicing for several months, Dong-Hyun mastered most of the moves and gained the official certificate much earlier than I did. However, there was one problem with him. Even though Dong-Hyun was very talented at Tae-Kwon-Do, he did not have much motivation for it, but rather preferred to study science. Tae-Kwon-Do, for Dong-Hyun, was just a leisure activity. Without much motivation to practice Tae-Kwon-Do, Dong-Hyun did not improve as rapidly as before after he received the certificate, but poured his effort into learning physics. Soon, Dong-Hyun ceased to practice Tae-Kwon-Do to follow his motivation to study physics. Eventually, in the year I achieved to win the third gold medal, Dong-Hyun won the physics competition held in his school.
Having talent for a certain field and also having motivation for the same field are an extremely lucky case; however, for most cases, what a person is good at does not match what the person eagers to achieve. Even though I was not a talented athlete, I succeeded to become a highly-skilled Tae-Kwon-Do fighter just like Dong-Hyun achieved to win the physics competition. I can deduce from my childhood experiences that to become an expert in a certain field, motivation is more important than talent.</p>