Grade my SAT Essay on a scale of 2-12?

Prompt: Do we need other people in order to understand ourselves?

Most people in the world today have adults that they look up to nearly every day. In order for us humans to fully reach our potential, we need to observe other people to understand ourselves better.

In the case of myself, my father is my role model. During my years in elementary and middle school, I always believed I was the smartest person in my class, and that I was superior towards others. However, one day, my father came up to me and explained al the aspects of my disposition that I was bereft of. He explicated that there were many other people like me, and also included that I was not the person that I always believed I was. This encounter with my dad regarding the true understanding of myself completely changed the way I viewed life through my eyes. Without this explanation of my true self, I would still not be able to recognize my true character.

This same reasoning can be applied through the life of one of the more profoundly influential individuals of this age, Bill Gates. Growing up, he never realized his potential of becoming an industrial tycoon until his teacher talked with his parents. He was the most erudite kid at school, but never made an effort to take advantage of his deft skills. After his parents’ talk with the teacher, 15 year old Bill Gates started to create small inventions and gradually started to realize his true gift of intelligence. He moved up to become the most richest men in the world, which can be partly attributed to the revealment of his true self by his school teacher.

Based on my personal experience and the life of Bill Gates, it is vital for humans to reveal their true self through other people. When this course of action is taken, people will strive to reach their full potential and at the same time make fewer mistakes.

*Grammatical errors
*Essay too short

7-8/12

The first time I took the SAT I focused on really saying something meaningful- but it was short. I got a 6/12
The second time I focused more on length than really saying something, whilst adhering to basic essay format, because I read online that length is what really matters. So I made sure to fill up ALL the space even though I felt like my essay was not as good. I got an 11/12.

Correlation isn’t causation, but just putting it out there. I would give this a 7.

7

I agree with the above posts. While grammatical error isn’t crucial and won’t really hurt your grade, length will. Make sure your essay fills up the whole 2 pages. Your examples are pretty strong; however, I would stay away from personal examples. Though personal examples aren’t bad, I would stick with historical and literature examples.