Hi please grade my essay.

<p>Hi this is an SAT essay prompt.
Could you please give it your estimate of a score, thanks.</p>

<p>The prompt is:
"The price of greatness is responsibility"
Winston Churchill
Do we expect too much from our public figures? Plan your response, then write an essay.</p>

<p>We do expect too much from our public figures. However there are qualifications to that. From the viewpoint of a common citizen it is always impossible to know what truly goes on inside the offices of our public leaders. Therefore, without the context of what truly happens on a day-to-day basis on the inside, citizens can only understand so much.
Truly, on the inside of political/public figures and leaders, the people on the inside do not have the same considerations nor expectations as the public does. This is because of a lack of understanding; The public can only judge from what is presented to them. To illustrate what I mean, there was a book called Generation kill, about the 1st Marine reconnaissance battalion in the beginning of the Gulf war. The truth behind what combat life truly was like, was revealed. Nothing was so flaunt-y and dreamy and idealistic. The soldiers viewed themselves as "America's bulldog". "Sometimes they beat us [Marines], and only feed us to keep us from starving. And then, once in a while they let us put all that pent-up anger out on somebody." It is difficult to truly document what the book really was about- but one thing it meant, was that the average American was becoming more detached from the reality of war. This applies to political office. Without inside understanding, sometimes the public just interprets what they see. This caused very much the Vietnam war backlash, or is even why MLK is so revered today. MLK's closest friends had that all-important "context", and never revered him as a higher-than-godlike figure as we do today.
This is why we do expect too much from our public figures. On the inside, every failure still has team effort involved in it. Just like how the public may react to a political blunder, they may react to a military's operational failure similarly. But Generation Kill tells and gives us a different perspective on every success and failure in war- but unfortunately not for public office and figures. This is why we expect too much.</p>

<p>Thanks.</p>

<p>:-|</p>

<p>You use “truly” too much. </p>

<p>Your essay is pretty disorganized. I’m sure you have good proof of your claim, but to really get it across to the graders, you have to organize your examples. Simply, pick at least two examples that clarify your claim and write a paragraph about each. Once you get comfortable doing this, you can even ad in a concession paragraph, which shows a counterexample and then refutes it. The more disorganized, or rambling your essay is, the more likely the graders will misunderstand what you are trying to say and give you a bad grade.</p>