Please read and grade my essay! Thanks :)

<p>PROMPT: “The price of greatness is responsibility.”
Winston Churchill
Assignment:
Do we expect too much from our public figures? Plan your response, and then write an essay...</p>

<pre><code>It is easy to demand perfection from public figures, especially elected officials like the United States president or celebrities deemed role models for children and society at large. We assume the power, wealth and resources available to these public figures should allow them to better our lives in every way possible, and we place them on a pedestal of expected infallibility. However, we place much too high expectations on most public figures. While they may have fame and financial or political power, these figures are simply human and are burdened by the pressures of society to achieve great things and provide for the rest of society.
One easy example of these high expectations involves the United States president. When a new president assumes office, typically every four or eight years, this figure is suddenly expected to solve all economic, social and military problems that often existed long before this new politician took power. The media criticizes the president for not doing enough, or for changing the course from plans or promises they made during their candidacy. The reality is that these figures may receive new information upon assuming office, allowing them to form different views and ideas on solving problems, from boosting the economy to removing troops from a war zone. A tactic they felt was perfect for rebuilding a disaster area or dealing with a certain foreign country may no longer seem to be the most effective method. The presidency is clearly a highly desirable position for most U.S. politicians, yet the responsibility of the office , and pressure that comes with leading what is arguably the world’s most powerful nation, does not set this man or woman up for success.
Celebrities, similarly, are expected to serve as perfect role models and use their wealth and power for good. Even ones known for their philanthropic efforts, like Angelina Jolie, frequently come under fire for various personal reasons, like her low body weight. Miley Cyrus, in particular, has been a victim of enormous pressure from the media and society as a whole. As a former child star, with an image closely monitored by Disney, she now aims to formulate her own persona and style, which may be considered inappropriate or trashy by society at large. She is expected to serve as an ideal role model for children, even though that is a position she no longer wishes to fill. Fame comes with many perks, yet our expectations for these celebrities near guarantees they won’t live up to our standards of excellence.
Many people seek celebrity to further their careers and increase their personal power, yet this fame comes with great responsibility. Society’s expectations and standards leave these people nearly incapable of truly achieving ultimate success, and are instead constantly in limbo, unable to please everyone.
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<p>9/12. It’s good, however, there appears to only be one body paragraph (although the president example could easily make a second one, but it isn’t separated properly.) Splitting it up would make it better, as well as making the intro a bit more explanatory, rather than jumping into an example straight away.</p>

<p>Hmmmm something got weird when I posted it…the indents don’t appear on here</p>

<p>the first body paragraph is the presidency one…starts with “One easy example of these high expectations involves the United States president” and the second body paragraph starts with “Celebrities, similarly, are expected to serve as perfect role models and use their wealth and power for good”</p>

<p>Anyway, thanks for the input!</p>