How can I make this essay better?

<p>This is my essay from the early october sat. I scored a 10. It was one of the most challenging prompts I have ever had to write for, and I was stuck for the longest time. If anyone could give me specifics as to why I received 2 5's instead of 2 6's, I would be very grateful. Also, what is the best thing to do when you are completely stumped by a prompt?</p>

<p>Prompt: Do the actions of high achievers benefit all people?
1st page:
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<p>2nd page:
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