My Best Essay Yet? The train ride to Maturity

College Essays
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<p>Hey guys,</p>

<p>Well after my last essay which was an epic fail. I decided to create a more personal, unique essay. I would really like someone to read it an help me fine tune anything you believe needs help.
I'm also willing to read essays.</p>

<p>Thanks guys</p>

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<p>anybody>??</p>

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<p>sure pm me</p>

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<p>I will take a look if you PM the essay to me.</p>

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<p>pm it to me</p>

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<p>I’m sure others can do a better job of reviewing your essay. but one issue you may be having getting responses to your request is the title of your essay… </p>

<p>The 1st thing that comes to mind is that it’s written by someone who is still very young, because maturity is an ongoing process not a destination. You can take a train to Boston and arrive in Boston, but maturity is ongoing (with some very fun detours). </p>

<p>I would also avoid using an analogy that can quickly be turned negative (Train Ride / Train Wreck), your just begging for a clever negative review…</p>

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<p>I’d be interested in giving a solid critique for you.</p>

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<p>I will edit it for you. PM</p>

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<p>i’d be interested.</p>

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<p>Sent it out to everyone, Thanks for your help guys.</p>

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<p>PM it over!</p>

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<p>Sent to all who have asked</p>

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<p>So far I have this
Amazing: 3
Ok: 1
New Essay: 1</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look , I don’t sugarcoat my advice though, just warning ya ; )</p>

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<p>Sure, I’ll take a look at it!</p>

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<p>pm it to me</p>

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<p>i can take a look if you’d like. PM it over!</p>

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<p>Sure thing, send it over.</p>

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<p>I’d gladly read it too, just PM me.</p>

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<p>sure just pm your essay</p>