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<p>Can people have too much enthusiasm?
People can have too much enthusiasm, and this overzealous attitude will most likely make them meet their demise. Those who are too optimistic about the outcome of events are destined for disappointment. Sports and literature prove that one can in fact be too positive. Voltaire’s novella Candide is a prime paradigm of an overly enthusiastic person’s downfall. Likewise, professional sports teams with high payrolls can relate, as they expect the bang for their buck. The Pardoner's Tale, a story from Canterbury Tales by Geoffery Chaucer, portrays how three enthusiastic men die of greed.
Candide clearly conveys overly optimistic character’s like Pangloss. Pangloss is a famous philosopher who states: “All is for the best”. Candide’s journey is harsh, as war was opulent and he learns the harsh reality that all is not for the best. Although Candide strikes luck once or twice, he encounters many challenges like being a slave and a fugitive, and learns that life is not easy in anyway. He longs for love and after saving Lady Cunegonde’s brother he still forbids them to wed. This is an ironic way to learn the worst fact of life- not everything is in the best interest of mankind. An overzealous nature leads to nothing but disappointment, as Candide lived on a farm struggling to get by after losing all his riches to swindling crooks.
Sports teams with notoriously high pay rolls like the Yankees are almost always disappointed if they do not win the Stanley Cup, World Series, Super Bowl, etc. The last game of the season is the only one that matters and teams like the 2001 Oakland Athletics drive fans and managers alike, insane. The Athletics had the lowest payroll and relatively low expectations; however, they managed to beat high pay rolled teams like the Yankees and have one of the most successful seasons of all time. On the contrary, the Yankees were nothing but disappointed after expecting to win the World Series, and losing to a team like the Athletics. The overzealousness of the manager and fans caused nothing but disappointment.
In Geoffery Chaucer’s the Pardoner’s Tale three man take a pact against death. The men are very optimistic to find death and destroy it, as they mourn the death of their good friend. A man tells the men they would find death under a tree in the center of town; however, they find nothing but gold. Bewildered the men took the treasure and almost already spend it in their minds, however, greed comes into play. The overly optimistic men end up killing each other for a larger share. Two of the brothers killed one with a dagger and the remaining brothers were poisoned by the dead brother. The men were sure their plans would work, but instead met an ironic death.<br>
Although being enthusiastic can be a good trait in moderation it is indeed possible to be too optimistic. Throughout history, sport, and literature men have met disappointment with a smile that shortly after turned into a frown. Overzealous people can drain themselves by putting too much stress on themselves and expecting results that are not always plausible. It is impossible to predict the future; however, it is possible to be practical and know that not every outcome will be positive.</p>

<p>At least a 10</p>

<p>you think it could get graded better though…i need to rely heavily on the essay because grammar rules stink lol.</p>

<p>possibly but i’m not an essay grader so can’t really say</p>

<p>10.</p>

<p>I would use a better variety of examples - aka don’t use 2 book examples.</p>

<p>I would give it a 4/6. Sorry but I don’t think it can get more than that. You could have stayed with two examples and insightfully developed them. I didn’t understand the use of “plausible” in the concluding paragraph. Is it “possible”? I don’t think “plausible” makes any sense there. plausible means believable or credible.</p>

<p>plau·si·ble/ˈplôzəbəl/
Adjective: </p>

<pre><code>(of an argument or statement) Seeming reasonable or probable.
(of a person) Skilled at producing persuasive arguments, esp. ones intended to deceive.
</code></pre>

<p>Synonyms:<br>
probable - likely - credible - believable - POSSIBLE</p>

<p>From google</p>

<p>i think plausible works because its not a credible thing to think, thus making it not plausible…idk to each his own.</p>