<p>sorry for going back, but was it “was” or “were”???</p>
<p>and i puk awakened</p>
<p>what about the stargazing one
was it “that caused” or “causes”
I put causes because it wasnt a one time occured</p>
<p>the son and father should of been left the same right? not changed to the estranged father and reconcilating son.</p>
<p>should have been estranged +reconciliating, more specific</p>
<p>It should be cause mournful didn’t make any sense to just describe the son and father…it had to have justification. </p>
<p>Also it is AWAKEN. was awaken by the sound, not was AWAKENED. i’m positive.</p>
<p>i said kept b/c of the clarification…</p>
<p>I put it should be left the same because it’s more concise.</p>
<p>it’s awakened. You can’t be awaken by sound, you can be awoken.</p>
<p>for the stargazing one, did u just put “the” beginning of a life long blah blah, or did u say OMIT?</p>
<p>It was indeed awakened. Go to Google and type “I was awaken by.” It will say: did you mean: “I was awakened by”</p>
<p>^the type of music being played would not make sense without the addition of the 2 words (not really making it less concise)</p>
<p>I omitted it…</p>
<p>He already described the type of music a bit, though. It seemed like added all those specifics was just distracting.</p>
<p>^i dont think omitting it would be wise because it not extraneous or anything. I just put “the” though</p>
<p>@HN it never explained why there was celtic songs for mourning, something that I think needs some explanation…</p>
<p>I’m positive that you were supposed to change it to the thing about the father and son’s relationship.</p>
<p>Yeah, you’re probably right.
I’m officially going to stop worrying about this section, The most I could move up is one point anyways.</p>
<p>@HN yeah i feel the same about science. Lol ya for superscoring!</p>
<p>lol, right! :)</p>
<p>It wasn’t about the father and son’s relationship. That diverts from what the paragraph was talking about, which was music. I don’t exactly remember what it was but you definitely weren’t supposed to expand on their relationship. That was just an example.</p>