<p>Suleyman95, I didn’t mean to offend you (I still don’t know why you did).</p>
<p>I just wanted to make sure that the OP knows that you can still get a 10+ w/out a 5 paragraph essay.</p>
<p>Princeton Review, might I add, recommends a 4 paragraph essay. Are you saying that people who follow PR’s essay techniques can only receive a 9 or lower?</p>
<p>Btw, you are wrong. My essay (11 w/ 4 paragraphs) is a direct contradiction to your statement that one needs a 5 paragraph essay to get a 10+. That’s what 314159265 was alluding at.</p>
<p>Additionally, I wrote a 3 paragraph essay (1 example) and I got a 10 for the March 2009 test.</p>
<p>However, I don’t think there is anything wrong with a 5 paragraph essay. Many ppl on CC use it, and many of them get great essay scores.</p>
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<p>@OP</p>
<p>If you combine your whole essay into one slightly shorter paragraph, and add one more example, your essay will be a lot better. Of course, you would have to add in a new intro and conclusion.</p>
<p>Try to think of a history/personal example since you already have a movie.</p>
<p>A sample history example:</p>
<p>Civil War: Abe Lincoln is usually the portrayed hero. However, there were the generals, soldiers, spies, civilians who provided food, etc. Try to give lots of detail here. If you ever read Shaara books (Gods and Generals, The Killer Angles or The Last Full Measure), this would be easy.</p>