<p>The First Sat Essay I Wrote,</p>
<p>Im going to be a sophomore in high school and today I wrote my first SAT essay. Im not really used to writing an essay under 25 minutes let alone read the prompt and write the essay. Im used to being in class and making a graphic organizer and then taking the full class next day to write the essay. Since this is my first essay, and since I have no idea what a 4, 5, 6, 1 essay is like, I was wondering if you all could grade it and give me feedback. I personally think the essay topic I got was hard!</p>
<p>Here is the Prompt:</p>
<p>Nowadays nothing is private: our culture has become too confessional and self-expressive. People think that to hide one's thoughts or feelings is to pretend not to have those thoughts or feelings. They assume that honesty requires one to express every inclination and impulse.</p>
<p>Assignment: Should people make more of an effort to keep some things private? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from </p>
<p>My essay:</p>
<pre><code> Imagine walking down the street and you hear a conversation between two people. It is a conversation about their home life and something you dont need to know. This type of event is common in everyday life. Many people have become too self-expressive to realize that they have left their very privacy at jeopardy.
In our world, the computer and the internet is a part of everyday life. Sites such as social networking site allow us to connect with friends and connect connect with others. When people are connecting with others, they tend to share personal information and it becomes available for everyone to read. People should make more effort to keep their thoughts and private conversations private. Privacy is what keeps others out of our lives and personal information.
On the internet, people are knows to sign up on different websites and in doing so giving out their personal information. Then this happens, there is a breach in their privacy. Sometimes websites are known to sell their information to others. About there months ago, I signed up for a free subscription to a magazine. I did not know that when I submitted this information, others would be able to look at it. The site I signed up for sold my information and I stared receiving junk mail to my house. After I was able to clear my make for the the third party sites, vowed to myself I would give my personal information to anyone else with making sure my privacy is safe.
In this modern era, privacy is a serious concern and it is important to make sure that it is secure. People like me, should start to make and effort to keep something s private.
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<p>That was my essay, please let me know what you would give this essay between a 1-6 and how I could make it better.</p>
<p>Thanks :D
Also Please keep in mind this is my first essay for the SAT :D</p>