Please read my essay.

College Essays
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<p>It is about a huge personal accomplishment, but more importantly the importance to me.</p>

<p>It is nowhere near done. Im still going to add another paragraph or so, and it only took me about 15 minutes to write what i have so far, but if someone could please help me out right now, tell me what is choppy and what needs fixing. Also, please tell me personal comments on if you like it so far, and if you were an admissions officer, where you would put it.
Throw away?
Decent?
Good?
Above most, but still not the best?
or
One of a kind. This guy is great? (the kind of essay that is so good it can make up for a slightly bad gpa/ whatnot.)</p>

<p>Comments would be nice.</p>

<p>Basically the essay is about how i started trying in school and how it shaped me as a student (it is very important to me, especially what i learned)</p>

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<p>PM Me, I'll take a look.</p>

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<p>Would gladly read. If it's beyond the alpha revision that would be best. Just PM it down!</p>

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<p>I'd love to read it! PM it over</p>

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<p>pm ill read it</p>

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<p>i'd like to see it.</p>

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<p>PM me , i'd try</p>

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<p>i would love to read it! and i don't steal ideas</p>

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<p>pm me, i can give you some advice</p>