read my essay purrty purttttty pleeeease

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<p>i really need help on my college essay from as many people as possible...my english teacher is a tad-bit ditzy, so i want some other feedback on my essay. please reply and i'll PM you my essay as soon as possible....</p>

<p>basically, i tell a story then its impact on me... i'm answering the Common App and USC essay question of the "significant experience and its impact on you".................. it's a pretty powerful story i think, so if u have time to read it, pleeeease reply</p>

<p>i'd apprectiae it thisssssssssss much</p>

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<p>I will. :)</p>

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<p>thanks i'll pm you now</p>

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<p>i will, if you'd like</p>

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<p>i will pm it to me plez</p>

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<p>i'll be happy to read it</p>

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<p>i'll be happy to read it</p>

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<p>I'll do it.</p>

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<p>I'll read it, please send it along.</p>

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<p>sure me too</p>

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<p>i'm a good editor....not to brag, but yeah.</p>

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<p>I'll read it.</p>

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<p>i wrote one as well so i may as well give u some feedbacks since i did my in class with my teacher. so feel free to pm me</p>

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<p>I read it and it was really good. But what's the topic of your essay? Was it a college-based or your own preference?</p>

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<p>the topic is the whole "describe a sginificant experience and it's impact on you/personal growth"</p>

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<p>I just broswed through it in around 20 sec and i have to say while that is a well written essay, it is not what the uc will be looking for. </p>

<p>hmm a rep from ucsb once told me that its the content rather than the essay itswelf that will be judged.as long as your essay has a nice flow to it and is error free, you are good to go. to me, it seems as if you are trying too hard there. a bit hmm...impersonal. some people might even say thats complete balony...even if its not. the way you presented it to them makes you seem in a sense...superficial.</p>

<p>i am sorry but i do not mean anything in a malign way but you made a mistake that many others did; u tried too hard and didn't add that personal touch to the essay. in short, uc detests such writing...</p>

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<p>hmmmm.....</p>

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<p>I'll read it, if you wish.</p>

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<p>hook me up</p>

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<p>same here!</p>