Someone please review my essay!

<p>I spent pretty much all afternoon yesterday writing it. I am DEEPLY dissatisfied with it and have actually thought of throwing the entrie thing in the trash and starting anew....But then again, I remembered that I have until tommorow to finish my essays, so I probably won't have time to make a new one from scratch. Anyways, I REALLY need some help.</p>

<p>Please critique my essay and make suggestions as to how it could be better. Don't hesitate to tell me it's a piece of trash (in a constructively critical way at least :P)</p>

<p>THANKS!</p>

<p>Bump (10 char)</p>

<p>Please, Someone review my essays!! It's urgent! I'll PM it to you as soon as you post.</p>

<p>i'm no expert on essays...but i'll definetely be able to tell you if it's interesting...</p>

<p>bump! PLEASE NEED URGENT HELP!</p>