teachers love the essay, but i think i'm going to scrap it?

College Essays
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<p>So I've showed my essay to quite a number of people and a lot of adults seem to love it. I wrote about my Indian roots - about how although I barely know India since I've been living in Singapore for the past 15 years, I still love India. I try to demonstrate that after a trip to India alone, I mature as a person.</p>

<p>I wouldn't say it's touching or anything but it's very real. Everything in the essay really happened/happens, and I guess I can't express how I felt then in words now. I'm not happy with the essay at all, I was rather disgusted at my work.</p>

<p>I've always wanted to write some witty laconic essay that would leave the adcom thinking I was 'oh-so-cool' but I don't think I can recount any experience that left an impact on me, AND at the same time has space for humour.</p>

<p>So now I'm thinking, should I scrap my essay? I have about a day to write the new one, and I was thinking of writing about my graphic design business that I started since I was 11? Since I'm going into business in uni anyway, maybe it'd be more relevant?</p>

<p>Which one is better?</p>

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<p>i can take a look for you. not applying to the same schs as you</p>

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<p>I am skeptical about scrapping an essay that has been read, thought about and lived with for an extended period of time in favor of a brand new essay that has been thrown together in one day.</p>

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<p>But my current essay is about 1200 words (which is very unhealthy I see) and very hard to truncate in any way :/</p>

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<p>Did any of the adults who read it suggest ways to shorten it?</p>

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<p>If you cannot say that you are proud of your first essay, then scrap it. If your teachers liked it, then the essay should be enjoyable. But since you're unhappy, try to write the other essay and see which one you like better.(: </p>

<p>You can PM me and I'll try to help you out.</p>

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<p>ALRIGHT I'M DONE WITH IT!</p>

<p>It's 595 words, this essay!</p>

<p>I'll PM it to you right now.</p>

<p>I'd love so more feedback, please anyone? First draft. Interesting topic, I think. I am so tired, it's like 3:30am.</p>

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<p>pm me and i'll give it a look</p>

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<p>PM it to me. I would love to critique it :D</p>

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<p>PMing it to you two :)</p>

<p>Also, I have a question. I've chosen 'topic of your choice'. Should I add a title/heading to my essay?</p>

<p>And am I allowed to leave some footnotes? Just to explain what some Indian terms mean.</p>

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<p>^answer my question, someone?</p>

<p>And yeah, my essay is quite different. I'd love moreee readers please</p>