<p>I was wondering if you guys could please review and edit my essay. Thanks a lot!
Here's the prompt: "Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?" </p>
<p>My essay:
Children help us understand and notice several aspects about ourselves that even we failed to capture throughout our life. The qualities that I have were revealed to my eyes when I began volunteering as a teachers assistant at a preschool over summer. The giggling and screaming vibrating from the classroom walls as I entered the room made me wonder how Im going to handle these little mischief-makers. As I made my way toward the table, I whispered to myself to get down to their level and have fun with them. I sat down along with four other busy kids diligently working on their puzzles and helped each of them complete their puzzles. At first, I was scared they were going to throw a tantrum for telling them how to solve it, but they just paid attention to me as I instructed them through the process of completing the puzzles. The children here werent as bad as I thought theyd be; before I finished that thought, a little girl ran out of the classroom. My feelings were inexpressible; I stood there frozen for about thirty seconds before I sprinted out the door chasing that girl. It took me two minutes to catch that girl who, to me, couldve participated in the Olympic track team. After bringing that girl back into the classroom, I strictly enforced the rule that no one is allowed to go near a door without my or the teachers permission. At that moment, I know I sounded harsh, but sometimes one has to lead the children in the right direction in order to teach them responsibility. The maturity I showed in this classroom was a quality which I have never seen at home, where I was considered to be the child of the house.<br>
After about a week of volunteering, I got to know each of the little troublemakers better and was able to communicate really well with them. The fact that all the kids fought over me to read the book they wanted to hear made me feel extremely proud of myself for having a better interaction with the kids than the teacher did. Normally, I communicate well with all my classmates in school, but having to know that I interact well with people of all ages gave me confidence in that I can work well with anyone. One girl who was four years old came up to me and cuddled with me because she missed her mother. To cheer her mood up, I cracked some funny jokes and told her random stories. Coming to me rather than the teacher who is more experienced in these situations made me feel really proud of how responsible I was in handling the little girl who missed her mommy. This whole experience made feel like a role model and it made me so proud to believe that all these kids looked up to me as both a teacher and friend.
Leaving this preschool was one of the hardest things I had to do. This two weeks experience was an unforgettable one and I truly wished it could have lasted longer. The memories I made during these weeks were some of the happiest moments I encountered in my life; It was not just the fact that I came to understanding myself a whole lot better, but it was also seeing the innocence in the childrens laugh even when they laugh to the clowns hat trick which was performed repeatedly for about twenty times.</p>