UC Personal Statement Critique

College Essays
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<p>Hello. I was wondering if someone could help critique my first UC Personal Statement. I mainly just need some critique on the content at the moment because organization is still a bit choppy since I am just laying out the facts at the moment. If someone could read over it and give me some feedback than I'd be very grateful. </p>

<p>Prompt 1: Describe your world
Language-Barrier in Family: Parents speak Vietnamese; Children speak English
Vietnamese Cultural Traditions and appreciation of culture
Low-Income family</p>

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<p>Sure. just PM me. :)</p>

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<p>PM Sent. Thanks :D</p>

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<p>pm it here as well</p>