Wanna help me on my essay?

<p>Some descriptions can be good, but too much is never good.
Example:</p>

<p>"My heart started to beat fast and uncontrollably, as if the earth has been quavered by tremendous earthquake, and I could hear no more. All of my nerves seemed to be shut down. Too much stress and pressure from my work and study all came down to this and I could not resist the feeling of urgency and fear. It was too much for me to handle, I felt as if I would collapse. I felt alone and so powerless." </p>

<p>Adcoms HATE descriptions like this when you can simply write "I was nervous."</p>

<p>PM me and I'll be happy to read it!</p>

<p>yeah..i compete...i love the feeling when i dig my heel into someones ribs...ha ha....i feel like a monster when I spar</p>

<p>haha, awesome... me too. Been competing 11 years. Awesome sport:)</p>