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<p>Hey guys,
I'm pretty bad at essays apparently (8/12) so here's my second try at an essay. I type a lot faster than I can write and I did this one entirely in a word processor so it's probably unrealistic of what I could do in 25 minutes... But tell me what you think. I'm used to formal essays so it's been difficult adapting to the 25 minute essay. Thanks ahead of time!</p>

<p>PROMPT: Should people make more of an effort to keep some things private?</p>

<pre><code>In this age of technology, it is difficult to prevent information from being passed on, especially as fast, effective forms of communication such as the Internet enjoy widespread usage. However, a computer-savvy user knows that the key to being safe online is not the impossible task of preventing access to critical data, but rather to obfuscate the process of accessing this data such that the time it would take to obtain these desirable secrets is not worth the value of the treasure itself. Indeed, as the saying goes, “Knowledge is power.” In this case, knowing how to defend oneself from the possible dangers of technology will grant the power to remain unhampered by malicious users. Therefore it is important to restrain one’s private details from being shared on the Internet. Even small efforts to use slightly longer passwords or unfathomable usernames will ensure that one’s interests—such as money and family—remain safe.

Unfortunately though, families have recently come under attack from online communities. Children and adolescents, especially, are being discovered in online videos doing unusual and occasionally offensive activities, paving the way for vicious verbal assaults in chatrooms or online forums. One recent example can be seen in the case of the teenager nicknamed Jessi Slaughter, in which her tendency to dress scantily and use obscene language. Her information was left on her online accounts, and were found by various annoyed parties. They sent her death threats amongst other dangerous words, and to that end it was discovered that her family suffered great damage in both internal and external relations. All this could have been prevented by simply sharing less of her private information on the Internet.

In conclusion, though countries, notably the United States with its Patriot Act, often advocate some sacrifice of privacy in order to provide better security, the common citizen should still be wary of the private details he or she shares with others. The danger of not keeping this information secret is that there may be malicious uses for that data. Consequently, every person should make an effort to keep some things private and away from the Internet, and this applies especially to children. To the people who have purchased Internet services: “Buyer beware!”
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<p>PROMPT: Do people accomplish more when they are allowed to things in their own way?</p>

<pre><code>Often, the different choices made by individuals can be detrimental to their overall productivity. This can be observed in both real life as well as in literature. The fact of the matter is that when there is a central overseer to design and implement a system, to instruct and delegate tasks, more results can be obtained, at a higher quality.

A prime example of this would be in one of Henry Ford’s assembly lines. Each person has a specific task to attend, assigned by a manager. By repeating the same task and only doing one task, each worker becomes more proficient at his or her specific job. If the workers instead made whatever parts they desired, a barrage of redundant and lacking parts would arise. Furthermore, without expertise at producing a part, the quality of the goods manufactured diminishes as well. Overall, productivity has decreased, and therefore each part of that whole would have lower individual results as well.

Even a system designed to produce software has similar issues with divergent agendas. Interning at Maplesoft, a mathematical computation software company, I noticed that the directors of teams would have visions to be fulfilled by their subordinates. In each case, employees would be delegated tasks they were proficient at. The doctorate holders would tend to difficult branches such as software kernel optimizations, while less trained workers may work on the design and image of the product. Everyone would like to play around with colors and fancy shapes, but ultimately by doing what they were told (and were proficient in), the programmers got more done.

This concept continues to apply in the literary world, on a larger scale. Individuals can be more productive by listening to the masses. As Orson Scott Card once said, “Every human is but a tool waiting to be used by the rest of humanity.” In his book, “Ender’s Game”, a young boy must sacrifice himself to save humanity. Though it may not have been what he wanted, it was dictated by the will of the people. By doing it, he contributed more to the human race than he ever could have otherwise done in his life.

Through these examples, it is trivial to infer that while everyone may wish to partake in their own choice of activity, it is usually necessary to take instructions from a higher authority with greater foresight in order to achieve the maximum benefit to both oneself and the greater collective we call the human race.
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